All Comments on 'Bed & Breakfast Ch. 01'

Please continue.

Easy enough to read and sets up for good story. Very short though and with only two people you need more characterisation, and description to set the scenes. Reads a little like diary entries.

Thanks for your comments, both of you. The story and characters will develop over the course of the narrative arc and give more satisfaction than in this first installment. It will end up being relatively long, with a slow build up.

I'm new to this so any comments are greatly appreciated.

--the author