All Comments on 'Bedknobs and Broomsticks Ch. 01'

Interesting, but typical, scene. .

The story shows a lot of potential, mostly be a the majority of it is plausible. Some parts hold no appeal for me whatsoever and are to me a turn off, specifically the excessive humiliation and watersports just a huge no for me. That’s just personal preference and I know that lots of people do like those kinks.

Still there’s is a lot of very erotic content, as regards the implausible content; I thought the anal penetration was way over the top given that she’s vertically impaled on a massive substitute dildo. In reality I expect that would have caused a tear in the skin of the sphincter. To be honest I initially thought that using the bed frame would have caused a tear/ rip as well.

I thought that it a stroke of genius to have the other girl drop her Domme persona when she thought Lisa was genuinely hurt. Whilst this chapter doesn’t qualify as BDSM per se there’s obviously potential for these girls to start a relationship, presumably D/s.

Looking forward to reading more.

Tess (UK)

Thanks for your input, Tess. You are entirely correct that some of the physicalities of the situation are pretty unrealistic. Perhaps I got a bit carried away!

What category would you consider this, Non-consensual/Reluctant? I personally thought BDSM covered most bases with a story of this nature. A little bit of Bondage, Domination, Submission, and.. what's M stand for? Anyway I shall take this on board.

This was meant to be a complete short story but the website labelled it as Chapter 1 for some reason. I do have a sequel story in the works with the same characters, though, so there will be more.

Love it! Would love to see this become a series. Love the humiliation, love the uncertainty in Lisa’s attempt to grasp her neighbors intention, reluctance that just slightly crosses into non-con. Love it when it can be explained as two excited youth getting carried away while really feeling their inner turmoil to losing themselves in their desires. Perfectly done at the end to show that while not a complete psycho, their itch still needs scratching. Love when women dominate women. It always seems a bit crueler, and much smarter. The mind fuck aspect gets me every time. It ticked all my boxes! Thanks you for sharing and I hope we see more from you Kaadee!

Also, wanted to say that if there was a category of just reluctance it would fit their well. I hate that Reluctance/Non-Consensual share a category here. They are very different in my mind. I love reluctance and consensual non-consent which both fit in BDSM in my mind. I believe some good reluctance stories don’t get read as non-con is a fetish too far for many. Is it BDSM with out safe sane and consensual practices, no. Was this story safe, sane and consensual, no and yes. I can easily see, as Tess stated, it becoming a consensual non-consent dynamic, which falls in BDSM in my opinion. When young adults are exploring that line can be muddled. That is a fetish itself, and can be difficult to define in a black and white category structure which is why the story tags are here. It is because of this that I don’t believe a category change is strictly required. I would suggest in the future a paragraph lead in that some authors do to alert readers to any potential triggers that normally lead readers to cry foul. For example, if your are not in the category of Incest, Non-Con, Gay, Transgender, but elements of those categories exist in your story it is best to prepare the reader in some way. Readers may feel tricked even when you clearly label it in your story tags. No faster way to a 1 star vote and unreasonable rants in your comments than when that occurs. BDSM is a fit, because as Tess suggested their was genuine concern shown making this more consensual non-con which again fits in BDSM in my opinion. If it were to go down the blackmail path then Non-Con would be the appropriate category. Again, thanks for sharing, as the gray area is what makes this delicious for many of us!

Thanks for the input, Mc1sucks. I'm glad you like it! Definitely planning more, and already have some more scenes written. I understand what you mean regarding the category, and there is a future chapter planned that will certainly need to be in the reluctance/non-consensual section. Hopefully people will still read it!

I quite enjoyed it! The non-consent part was especially enjoyable to me.

Wow! Very hot, cant wait to read ch2 !

Love this story. Please remember you are never going to please everyone so just write to please yourself. I also liked how the Dom was able to switch it off at the end when she thought Lisa was in distress. Please keep writing stories here. I'm on the Chapt 2.

This is a great story, please add to it. The fact that Lisa is naked and then find she is in a situation she cannot escape from is a perfect next step. I love it when Evie locks Lisa's hands behind her back, I would like it if she also put a belt tight around Lisa's waist and locked the cuffs to the belt. Having your hands cuffed in the small of the back is very restrictive and is a great turn on. The more helpless you feel the better. I also loved adding the nipple clamps, I would suggest clover clamps, they are very effective and when the chain is pulled it adds to the sensation. Keep up the good work, looking forward to your next story.

Wonderful story I really enjoyed it, thanks for writing. I loved the fact that Lisa is naked, has her hands cuffed behind her back and is helpless and unable to free herself.

I also liked it when Lisa drank Evie's urine, at the time Lisa didn't know what it was, but then realized it was urine. Evie said you will have to finish this later; Evie should see to it that Lisa empty's the glass to earn her freedom. Imagine how humiliating it would be to be naked with your hands securely locked behind your back knowing there is no way you can ever get free on your own. And now you are informed you must drink a glass of someone's urine before you will be released. When do you accept the fact that you are not in control, your Master is the person in complete control? Eventually you will understand it doesn't matter how much you dislike something; you will still have to obey.

If you wish to experience the full excitement and thrill of what it is like to not have any control of what is happening to you and being fully under someone else's full control. You will have to find someone to put in charge. The person you pick must be able to take full control and should really push you to your limits and make things difficult for you. The person in charge must put you in secure bondage and make sure you have no way to escape on your own. To earn your freedom, you will be required to complete all the assigned tasks to the satisfaction of the supervisor and meet all her very high standards. The more you dislike your tasks the better, this will make the humiliation even greater.

To make this even more exciting give the person in charge full authority to add as many tasks as she thinks are necessary push you to your maximum limit and beyond.

The session must be long enough that you will not be able to think; If I can deceive my enforcer for the next two hours this will be over with, and I will be free. Something like a long weekend would be prefect. To fully experience the feeling of not having any control and no rights, the taskmaster must take you to a point that you feel hopeless and there is nothing to look forward to. The trainer must see to it that you fully surrender and are now at the point where you offer no resistance. This will allow you to really experience what you are looking for.

What would you think about scheduling several more sessions?

Maybe three, about a month apart? There should be a large penalty if you do not keep all these, something like a very big fine you would have to pay your taskmaster. You would now be locked into further training whether you dread it or not.

Ohhhhh I loved this story so much. A relief and joy at the end. Ohhhh I loved Lissie’s thoughts, the part of her that wanted only to be a sex-crazed slave.

Hey loved this story. It has the same title as mine at Literotica though the theme of mine is CFNM F/m. Give it a try and let me know your thoughts as a comment. Less is always more with these stories.