by namowa
Loving your work. Looking forward to uncle and aunt finding them...
...So glad you were encouraged by so many to continue, its a wonderful story... always enjoy reading the results of such hard work. You built up a beautiful background for your characters in this installment. And as so many are now likely to say, more would be nice! Longer chapters please :) Thanks for writing and hangin' in there to keep us entertained, it IS appreciated. Cheers! --- Josie
I wish they were longer, but this series is going to be a great one, I can feel it already!
I may be mildly annoyed by the brevity of chapters but their nice form compensates. Writers as babies learn first to crawl in short chapters, then do baby steps in full selfcontained ones, proceed to strides with multi chapter "tomes" and run with novellas. I like the way you keep the inner and outer transformations in sync on yr heroine! I still wait to see if Brad is a guy like me or not! (though he wouldn't make my past mistakes )...Haters rule by the way, the more you have the better your story is! Anyone worth anything has at least a couple of haters so just enjoy them!
so now you've proved to yourself and the world that you're a writer. Sure, everybody wants more. We pig out until the ice cream bucket is empty and still want more. Don't listen to them. Write the way you like, write the way you want, write from your heart...that's the only way. There are certain rules we expect you to abide by...but if the story is there we will all forgive the little hiccups along the way. Ask for help if you feel the need, or don't and thumb your nose. Relish in the joy of creativity and welcome to the club...no dues, just abundant criticism which is fun to ignore.
you did a much better job of editing this time. Great work! I hope to read more about how all this makes you feel. How does the actual evening with Brad compare to your level of anticipation. Looking forward to the next installment.
You seem to be leading up to an incredibly sexual and sensual encounter between Paul and Brad and I hope it's as intimate and explicit as it should be given the tension between them and the opportunity that Paul has to realize his fantasy of being handled and taken like a woman...
You did a very good chapter with nice character development.. please continue..
nice going .. and with a lovely sence of romance ...but dont leave it on the midway .......... i feel very disapointed, may be because i am very curious .. atleast make it little big ..... i will wait for next chapter soon ........... KISSES
Another beautifully written chapter in this wondrous character study of transformation. Your detail and look into the mind of Paula is wonderful, and the slow build up with the building and romantic relationship with Brad is very well done. Just enough spice to make a happy reader want more. I too, absolutely applaud your open letter at the start. It seems Paul/Paula isnt the only character being built here, but the author grows as well. Your style is wonderful and your work is showing a lot of progress. Go with what you know, and tell the story in your words is always the best way to write, and you are really on your way. Thank you so very much for this very wonderful, and important look into a beautiful soul. Keep them coming and enjoy the release.
your fan,
cliptoe