All Comments on 'Being Mr. Nice Guy'

In very few words you managed to write a nicely detailed story that was both sexy and sweet. Well done!

Looking good, Stud!

5

LOL. Love it. Write another one.

That was really touching and sweet!

Nicely done! Cheers. Frankie

Very nice! 5/5

Great short story! And what about the next morning? I must admit it did bring back more than one nice memory. Being a nice guy and easy to talk to apparently does bear sweet fruit occasionally. That first happened when a soft love song aimed at a particular pretty member of a group of wives in a bar had an unexpected impact. They were all out deciding what to do after all sharing similar stories from their pilot husbands about the other husbands' sexual antics on a "Med Cruise". Turns out ALL of them were when the ladies combined the stories. The other wives challenged her to do something about it. She cornered me in the hallway to the restrooms and after a messy kiss, she breathlessly told me she would see me when the place closed. She later shared the story with her friends and actually "loaned" me to a couple. I am not sure if I would have been the shared revenge for all of them, but a couple did before the damned military shipped a young enlisted man away and interrupted my off-base singing carrier in Jacksonille Florida. Yes, thanks for the five star memory once again.

You did a superb job penning the story, and your story structure provided enough clues for people to be able to fill in the blanks; I can see where you tried to compose a story in a way where somebody might think something different.. but if you carefully read, there's only a couple of solid conclusions you can really make.. and you can make a whole lot more if you just look up some simple stuff on blood alcohol level, how much a petite woman should weigh, and about how long they took and what her level of impairment would have been.

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It was pretty obvious that they spent approximately one and a half hours at the bar, since the story stipulates over the next hour or so: usually when I've listened to a woman's very personal sob story, it's been at least an hour and a half. From the fact your story posits she was not having trouble with balance, and she was not slurring her words, her blood alcohol level was clearly under .08. So for that to be true, she definitely consumed no more than two drinks, which would have put her blood alcohol level at about .06 or .07, and with the way you describe her, petite in the industry is defined as any woman 5 ft 3 in tall, with the ideal weight being 115 lb, plus or minus 11 lb. So even if we assume this woman was 126 lb and consuming whiskey sours, her blood alcohol level would have still been no higher than 07 after 1.5 hours for two drinks. Additionally, for them to have coupled twice, that would have taken another roughly more than an hour, meaning that for certain the second time she had sobered up enough to know exactly what she was doing and not really be impaired enough to say "well, the alcohol made me do it." So if somebody wanted to really be nitpicking, they would complain about trying to say the not knowing if it was her or the alcohol talking was just a badly botched misdirection attempt; there's no way by the science and the math this woman was impaired enough to not know what she was doing. It is also clear that he was not taking advantage of her, because a paragraph or so above that, where he kissed her, it was obvious he stated he was just going with the flow. If this guy was truly being a jerk and trying to take advantage of her, he would have said stuff like "oh hey, well yeah your husband was such a jerk to you, and I know how to show you a good time." You know.. something like that. In fact, he in his own mind- - as you revealed to us the readers - - was thinking of himself more as a friend she needed; it was obvious by her statement when she decided to go home with him that she was not having trouble evaluating the situation, which would have implied her BAL being higher than .08, so he was definitely the nice guy, and he was just in the right place at the right time. I suppose people could argue the toss of well, he took her home.. but the fact is he wasn't trying to manipulate her. So I suppose somebody could have that as a gripe, but I'm just going to say that yeah he was a nice guy; she appreciated the fact that he saw her as a woman and wanted to help her through a rough patch; therefore, she made the very largely-lucid decision to enjoy him, and let him enjoy her a second time. So for all these reasons, I am definitely rating this a 5.

Says what needed sayin' in just a few words. Good one!

Very nice and sweet, S.C. But, Humor & Satire? Because of 'Twice'? I gave this a 5* anyway.