by monochromaniac
one of the better written ones. more action needed, don't drag it out too much.
Please hurry with the next chapter....you've kinda left me hanging
Can't wait for the next chapter. That punishment scene was just the right blend without overdoing it. I love reading different interpretations of fairy tales. So far, so good. Pay no mind to the negative Anonymous critics.
this story. You are doing a good job, keep it up!
Clearly you have not grasped that this is fiction and for a target audience who understand the narrative arc and function of such stories. For your own state of mind I advise reading elsewhere.
The "steel fist in a velvet glove" is ideal to turn a spirited *person* into a subservient *object* without personality or free will (also known as "slave"). See also "Stockholm syndrome" for the type of manipulation occurring here.
You are doing an excellend job. This chapter was very effective by showing he can be strick/stern and yet, can be very gentle and kind. It is the perfect combination. I cant wait to actually learn more about who he really is. Keep up the great work. I am looking forward to your next chapter.
Oh this is just the right combination of control and manipulation. A steel fist in a velvet glove is always the most effective. And good composition too. Please keep it up.