All Comments on 'Ben and Julie Ch. 01'

And...???

A story I had a bit of a problem of getting into the visual scenes of a luscious curvy beautiful woman who would turn heads. She was 5’-9” and 160 pounds, that is a full figured woman. Maybe up to 140 pounds at 5’-9” a big boned woman would be considered hot and a head turner. It made all that came after an image of a heavy woman and not hot for me. A really good story occupies my mind with images of the dialogue, but this one invaded my mind with a heavy woman having sex and the dialogue couldn’t overcome that image. I’m sorry but that image of the woman spoiled all that followed, and was not sexy

The story was a nice start but it really didn’t end as they were: married 3 years and had moved to Myrtle Beach and WHAT. We hear how they meet and fall in love and Stop. Really it was like almost a chapter then it just abruptly stopped. Is there a continuation of this story?

Your writing is good to me and you have done an adequate job of the sex scenes. Keep writing and remember this is just one mans opinion and it should carry little real weight.

Thank you for your effort

PT