All Comments on 'Best Christmas Present Ever Ch. 01'

She wants him and he wants her. The build up is thick like a knife can cut it. Great read so far. Can't wait for Ch. 2

another chapter

Very good story, keep it coming.

Would love to read more.

Awesome story! So fucking hot! I agree with the other commenters that you need a followup chapter. Maybe Glyn can get Sandy to come over for supper and Mary can have a talk with her about her reluctance to go out with Glyn. When Sandy tells her why she won't go out with him, Mary can show her how to please Glyn without actually fucking him.

Now you must be working on another chapter, at least I sure hope so. She needs her son's cock in her cunt!

Chapters two, three,and four are being proof read at the moment.

That was exceptionally good, we so need another chapter.

I really enjoyed this, great concept and good pace to the story.

Great stuff. Almost believable (if you have a good imagination).

Great start to series! An enjoyable read.

Fabulous story, five stars. Looking forward to reading the other chapters.

another story about a guy with a 10 dick. Really? couldn't think of anything better?

Good story, but there are some takeaways.

- When using quotations, ending punctuation goes inside the last quotation such as "I'm going to the store," she said.

- Commas can be used liberally and your story could use some more for the natural pauses in speech.

- Other punctuation should replace what you have. Example: "Best Christmas present ever." An exclamation point would bring out the excitement that I feel should be there instead of a bland statement.

Thanks for the read.

Oh my god! This has really got me going