All Comments on 'Best Friends Need One Wife'

write some of this

You seriously need an editor, not to rain on your parade, but you do need someone to look your work over before you submit it. I was giving you the benefit of the doubt until Kat had an "organism", then I started cracking up, nice effort though.

pretty good story, BUT ... yep you definitely need an editor. mostly your stereotype of women is disturbing to me. just a personal thing you know ...but a definitely hot sex story.

Simple, didactic sentences are annoying--distracts from the main story to the point it's nearly unreadable... "See Spot run. See Jim chase Spot..." to belabor the point.

the plot needed a frisson of conflict ..i.e. the two guys were just too much a like and too friendly to one another ....just a tip

LOL! I've long thought that polyandry could solve a lot of problems. One woman could handle two husbands a whole lot better than one man having two wives. Ever wonder how well off a household might be with two or more men contributing? How well off kids might be with 2 or more dads taking parental interest in them? How loving a wife might become with two or more good men loving and giving her great sex?

I had to rate your story down a little though, The outcome was too much of a given. You need to learn how to create drama by introducing something that jeopardizes the desired ending. Your main characters have to overcome it

in order to achieve their desires.

Keep writing. I think you might have some really great stories in you.

This had a refreshingly interesting story line and a really sexy idea behind it.

However, I agree with most of the other comments. It needed a lot more work before being published.

Don't give up - keeping working at your writing. Find a good editor, preferably one who is in sympathy with your MMF preferences, with whom you can discuss the erotic thoughts behind your stories as well as the plot, narrative, grammar, etc. Good luck

The idea of 2 guys 1 wife = brilliant. Sigh. I wish my wife would be up for that.

the two guys should have just married each other as much as they loved each other? A great story written by a woman for women. Just get two braindead men and marry in a single ceremony. Much too deep for most but just right for some it appears.

It's look like three brain dead morons.

Need to hear more about mark jim and Kat. This story made me bust a big load. Me re please

I luv dpp, one of my fantasies, but this was preposterous

The plot is unique and could become quite interesting. To fully realize its potential, however, Mark and Jim would have to admit their attraction to each other. This scenario is only feasible if the two husbands are bi. Otherwise, no man would ever tell another to assume a place equal to his own in the life, mind, heart and cunt of his wife.

If you liked this, which I certainly did, read some of my stories, like our sexy adventure. I love the concept.