by cellophanesmile
Okay, you left plausible believability far behind once again. There's no way in hell that the two sons of a Duke would be out on the ocean alone in a boat. You're walking into the realm of the absurd again just like when you wrote about an 8 year old girl having boobies.
Don't you realize that half of the kingdom would have taken up searching for the body. Too far fetched, so you get 2/5.
Yes, I loved this story at first but am dissapointed. You took the short way out. More details are needed.
Also, the vocabulary is too modern for the seting.
I dont think ive enjoyed a story here this much in a while!! Its captivating!
I can't believe it....All that buliding up.....Too short,too short,too short.....When I first started reading it I was soo hooked. I thought WOW this is going to be a good story but this last chapter is truly disappointing...
Oh the possibilities....