All Comments on 'Better Than a Hairbrush'

I liked the set-up but I felt there were afterthoughts being tossed in so that I just didn't believe the story. I would advise a good editor. There is some promise, but discipline is required.

"Separation from friends and f****y is a part of life."

" The girl darted across the beach and launched herself at me. She jumped into my arms and f***ed her lips, hard, against mine."

Seriously? this is an ADULT site, you can't write the words? I'm guessing they're FAMILY and FORCED, nothing wrong with those words. Poorly written and I'm left wondering how old the 'girl' was when she didn't know what a condom was for even though she asked if he had one.

WTF was this supposed to be?

5' 10" and only 110lb? That's sickeningly underweight.