All Comments on 'Beware the Margay'

I think my only significant criticism would be the feeling of rushing to the end. The pace felt like it changed too much as the story progressed, getting faster and faster.

A bit more character development (of tertiary characters perhaps) tucked into the middle might have helped. At the end, without making too many changes to the story I'm not sure how you could have adjusted the pace.

In any case, more in this setting would be appreciated.

Great worldbuilding and characters- but this couldve gone on longer. Jacinta needed some more time and the Neko seemed go come out of no where in terms of a whole army just appearing.

Also Herla just vanished halfway through which was disappointing!

Overall a REALLY fun story with pretty good pacing and a great world - plus excellent sex scenes. Just maybe a couple ir nore paragraphs in the end as it loses a bit of focus going from Bast to Calista.

Thank you for sharing!

I completely enjoyed it. I agree that the end felt a little rushed but that's ok. Its an interesting setting.

As long as this is Monty, I want more. I'd give this 10 ⭐ if I could. Will there be more? I guess we'll see. If you have never read anything else from Monty I highly recommend that you check his catalog. I really hope we get more of Samuel and Bast.

It's so good to b reading one of your stories again, can hardly wait for more on this story.

A very long ambitious story and you nailed it. There were no points where I felt lost. Great characters and setting. Thank you.

cross species bombast with a blood topping...giggle!

Spectacular story. What a cool world you created. Thanks!

Just... wow. This was awesome. thank you for sharing it with us!

This was a great story. You created a world, a fascinating cast of characters, and a plot that flowed seamlessly between scenes. The excellent grammar and editing made this a joy to read. Well done!

I hope the ending was just a prelude to the beginning of the next tale in a series from this world. I really like the long format. I am willing to wait the time it takes to produce a complete story.

Thank you for sharing Beware the Margay with us.

Wow! Awesome story. Thank you so very much.

You are a legend mate.

Great story, really enjoyed. Would love to hear more from Samuel and his wives or even just the world you created.

Great story, would love to see more !

Loved it, 10/10, still a huge fan of your work.

I really like the whole story. I was espically impressed the sex at the end wasn't too drawn out and even contributed to plot for a potential sequel. Well done

Brilliant!!!!!!!!! Absolutely Fucking Brilliant!!!!!!!! Even better than The Beast, hopefully there won’t be such profound sadness in this story, a little sadness is ok but the last few pages of The Beast part 2 broke (nearly shattered) my heart

Absolutely loved it, 5 stars. The characters and personalities that you crafted for the harem were all unique and lovable, but I agree with another commenter that Jacinta could have done with a bit more development.

I really hope this is the beginnings of a series and looking forward to more!

This was flat out fucking awesome. Due to life, I had to binge this over two days but DAMN did I have trouble putting it down. The world felt fleshed out, every character felt like a real person (even the POSs) and the story was just as good as the sex.

I’ve said it before on Amazon but it bears repeating. You have a damn gift and I’m glad you’ve decided to share it with us all.

I binged this story in 2 days. I absolutely loved it! 5/5!

5 hours and a lot of emotional investment later...I love the story and look forward to whatever works come out it the future

OK, that was great but I do have to admit I’ve really been waiting for the continuation of the beast, the leader. Any chance we’ll ever see an ending there, or have you pretty much moved on to other things? (No real complaints if that is the case all your work I’ve read has been pretty stellar so whatever you’re writing process is it’s working for you, I’ll just be over here in the corner being sad)

This was a lot of fun, great story, interesting world. Was there some CoC inspiration for this? If so, you took it in a new direction that was quite entertaining.

Great work. Loved every moment of it. Hope to see it continued. Fate of the valley, politics, children? Plenty of ways I can see this go. Great as is, hope it isn't a one shot. Keep it up

Fantastic! It was a joy to read. Beautifully developed characters and a gripping story. Kudos!

Greatly developed characters

Love the story, it was terrific . AAAAAA++++++

You beautiful bastard I was supposed to sleep before work but instead powered through the entire furry harem adventure in one go

An incredible story! Well paced and keeps you wanting more. In fact, that’s my only complaint. I want more!

Looking over the story again I see some things that may help if you want to continue with the story.

Example:

Dave sighed, "It was not a fair accusation. Bast would not have sent a monster as her champion."

"How are you so accepting of that, anyway?" I asked. "Anyone could make a claim like that."

Dave looked at me for a moment, "The fact you do not know this, is almost undeniable proof. Misfortune follows those who claim to know the gods. In this world, even the forgotten have power. I knew a goblin that claimed to be the champion of Asmodeus. He died shortly after contracting a flesh eating disease that made his pecker fall off."

In this world, even the forgotten have power. THAT could be a catalyst to kickstart a new chapter alone. What’s forgotten in this world that may draw Samuel to “fix” it? Or what forgotten power wishes to rise and perhaps make an accidental enemy of Bast so that she has to send Samuel to investigate?

Another thing I saw was that all champions are brought from another world. That too could be used in creating new conflict or catalyst for change to draw Samuel to start a new quest. Hmm, what would happen if Bast has 2 champions, one may or one female?

Actually there is a negative point I want to raise in this story. It was almost too easy for Samuel. Oh sure he was injured several times, but he prevailed in everything he did. There’s an approach many authors take that I call the 3 and win. Meaning that when the protagonist is presented with the quest, they have a series of setbacks and failures that reveal critical things and develop the character so that when the final confrontation is upon them, they have the skills, knowledge, resources, or whatever they need to win. It keeps the character humble in winning (arrogance being a fatal flaw for most villains), it makes the win all the more sweeter because not anyone could do it, and if done well, prevents the protagonist from becoming too powerful to make a second chapter untenable.

Anyway, just wanted to share this and thank you for posting your work with us

Moron, he should have chosen tiger

Loved it, I whant more. I want to see what he will do for the slave and do to counter the humans. And problem with other gods and goddesses.

I truly want more pls

More please

Reread this after rereading the first 3 books of Trolling in Paradise, still so very excited to get to read book 4 in that series.

I hate you made the cat people blind in the dark. You know that felines are nocturnal? That means they hunt at night. Their eyes are designed to help them see even in almost pitch blackness. 2 star

Bast must be dumb as fuck to give him a margay body but not margay eyes. They hunt almost exclusively at night so seeing in the dark should be no problem. Like all cats.

Amazing. Wishing for a sequel, or more stories like this. Next time, maybe don’t leave out some major details like the eyesight of the margay though.

There is more I hope. Good story

Oh, where do I even begin with this? It is really in the Montgomery Quinn style, and as other commenters have pointed out, it has a great story line.

What nobody else seems to have pointed out is how this story uses the word "softly" so excessively that I began to wonder if the author had a secret agenda to promote the softness of, well, everything in the universe.

I mean, who needs variety in their writing anyway? Clearly, the word "softly" is the literary equivalent of a one-size-fits-all sock. Why bother with synonyms when you can just sprinkle "softly" liberally throughout your story like fairy dust? It's as if the author stumbled upon this word and thought, "Eureka! This is it, the golden word that will unlock the secrets of writing!" Spoiler alert: it's not.

The characters, oh, the characters in this story. They didn't just speak, they spoke softly. They didn't just walk, they walked softly. They didn't smile, they smiled softly. They didn't even breathe, they softly exhaled. It's a wonder they didn't start softly screaming at the top of their softly whispering lungs out of sheer frustration.

I have to give credit to the author, though. There is certainly a commitment to the theme of softness. In fact, I wouldn't be surprised if there is a sequel coming titled "Softly Softly Softly" – a thrilling tale of softness in a soft world where everything is softly done. (Everyone even nods softly!)

But in all seriousness, it's crucial to vary your language and avoid overusing any word, especially one as... um, "softly" as this. It's like trying to eat a meal made entirely of marshmallows; it may seem like a good idea at first, but after a while, you realize you need some substance to sink your teeth into. So, dear author, please, for the love of literature, find some new adverbs. Softly, if you must.

Great read. Romantic adventure never became mundane because everything was copiously lubricated. 🍯 Hmmm, dripping. 💦 Honeypots

Curvy ladies. Horny curvy ladies. Furry, horny, curvy ladies. 🧍🏽‍♀️ I would have liked to attend that ongoing party 🍑🎸