All Comments on 'Bill’s Pony Slaves'

You took a good idea and a good plot (people consensually engaging in contractual relationships, so no big issues) and you executed it with the dryness of sunbaked cardboard. This story should have lasted several times as many words. You could have a couple of vivid sex scenes, some ponygirl training scenes, a bit of psych and internal monologue on Debbie's part, and you would have had yourself a fantastic story. This just feels like the Cliff Notes version of what it could have been.