All Comments on 'Birthday Suit Required'

A nice sensual story. Looking forward to the next chapter

Immediately engaging story, Very well written.

Need more of Nita. Much more.

Wonderful story shame we can only give it 5 star's and were hoping for more to this story.

Very hot!

Great story

Really sensual. Could have done without the security chip thing. That's just creepy

Great imagination! Wonderfully erotic! A constant tease building to the spotlight show.

Very hot. Love sibling sex.

Hope there's more to come. Wanna see some backstory on Nita.

What's up with the chip? Seems there's more to your story than just a sex club. Very interested in where you go. 5/5 stars

Dewey Cheatham

Everything felt very matter of fact. The lap dance sequence for rudy was one of the least sexy descriptions you could have come up with. It's a list of actions rather than anything personal to the story teller. Many other sections of the story have similar issues. Another good example would be the dinner scenes where the food is described as the best but really just comes off as a list of dishes. In the future, linger more on the descriptions of the things you want to include, and exclude things that aren't important. Instead of "As the music began to play, Carli put the card and mic down on the floor and started doing one hell of a lap dance. It was full contact, no holds barred lap dancing. Rudy was immediately erect. He fondled her breasts, kissed them, licked them, fingered her pussy and her ass, kissed her pussy and her ass, he had his hands all over her. This continued for about two minutes, until somebody called "Time", and then the next lady in line took her place."

Let's describe the dance. "As the music began to play, Carli turned her back shaking her ass in Rudy's face as she lowered the card and mic to the floor. After a quick grind on his lap against his hardening cock, she spun and worked her way up his body teasing him with her breasts. Rudy couldn't restrain himself. He fondled her breasts, but like a kid in a candy store didn't stay there for long ad had to try everything. By the end of the dance he'd kissed them, licked them, fingered her pussy and her ass, kissed her pussy and her ass, he had his hands all over her. 'Time' was called and after an initial bout of disappointment being torn away from her perfect mounds his attention was drawn to the next women taking Carli's place."

Very nice entry.

More of the same would be welcome.

Nice. Wish we had a club like that around here.

How do I vote?

This is fantastic!

Thanks.

Keep the story going

Great story. Looking forward to more.

Ok. One of the most erotic and imaginative stories I have read for a while.

While a great story, it lacks in the sense that it requires follow-up chapters. Hopefully you will continue their story.

Thanks.

G

Excellent!

Simply excellent!

Holy shit! How in the hell is anybody supposed to compete with this? Can I give it the 15 or 20* it deserves?

Please make a sequal or series for this

This definitely deserves to become a series. What else do our sibling couple get up to? Now that he's micro-chipped, what else is he going to do at the club? More, please.

Wunderbar zu lesen. Lässt meine Erinnerung wach werden. Ich hatte das vergnügen nach meiner Yogastunde mit drei Frauen nackt eine Verlängerung zu bekommen. Es gab ein Getränk und wir haben zwei Stunden lang gefickt. Es war ein Rausch.

Very enjoyable story. Thank you.

Always enjoy a good Texas yarn and this was a good one! Very enjoyable! Good luck in the competition.

Cheers

SAGE

Honestly disgusted by this and I usually like the authors work.