All Comments on 'Blackjack Game'

Most paragraphs started with person won that person won. Got blurry and hard to read that way. Theme and topic were hot. The executions could have been better. Why the hurry author. You had a fun premise. Yet you blazed through it. I can see there is talent in the author.

This needs a sequel! Thoroughly enjoyable, although you could have added some more drama, with Katie worrying about fucking Paul, or the narrator worried about it, but then relenting. 5* in any event. ~~JB

PS: I agree with Anonymous ("Most paragraphs ... ")

You think? (cheated)

Time for a payback story! Should be exciting!

Black Jack will never be the same.

Another good story, keep it up.

Typical TOD some one always losses. "You" two lost. Write a story about revenge for "you" and Katie.