by charlieflemming
I think your writing might be getting worse. I know that's hard to believe. How could it possibly get worse? Right?
I'm the first to comment. This story needs to get down to business. . . not prolong any sex to occur, after all it submitted under the incest/taboo heading. If you think you will hold reader's interest much longer, you have another think coming. Get with it!
Not bad
Enjoyed the fore playing
Keep at it
As long as it keeps getting kinkier you don’t have to rush the intercourse part
I can't tell you how much I want his two.moms, two sisters, four aunts and four cousins to poison Justplainjeff's ass.
Just wanted to say, making your woman live without panties can easily end up in a yeast infection for her. Then there is her periods. Details like that put me off
But, I sure am weird for where I draw the line at realism
Going without panties is sexy, but impractical. If nothing else you don't get any strip teases. Limiting the underwear to attractive underwear seems better. Also allows for toys to be more safely used at work, risk is one thing but I doubt 'Bruce' wants his plans ruined.