All Comments on 'Blonde's First Anal Experience'

Premise with possibilities.

But reaally meh.

Three stars, being generous.

Nice!

A very hot story was made less so by so many spelling mistakes. Please have someone proofread before submitting. The story was great, but in places looked like it was written by a child because of basic spelling errors.

Judging by how this is written, I don't think you're old enough to read the stories on Lit, much less write for them. Nice try, kid.

Needs editing but good all the same, too short

"I recall having my index finger buried up to my knuckle in her ass while fucking her hard and slapping her face..........."

"I slapped her face and told her to ask me to "please fuck my ass daddy"

"but I slapped her harder and sternly said:........"

"is a testament to how much I care for her........

You are sick and need help before you start applying your imagination in real life.

This was badly written and full of errors, unpleasant reading, I'm just glad that I don't know you.