by rdmaddog
A well told story. The characters were people you could care about and cry for ...
I enjoyed the story, it had interesting elements both erotic and melancholy. That said, maybe get someone who actually speaks spanish to edit the more erotic-themed phrases - it's really disconcerting for a spanish speaker to read them as they are. It took me out of the moment a bit... also some of it was some sort of bastardized italian??