All Comments on 'Bloodlines Ch. 02'

Through and through, a wonderfully written story that flows through time! Thank you for sharing this with us!

But it seemed rushed.

This isn't a bad story, but it suffers in comparison to chapter 1. Almost as if you were rushing through just to resolve the cliffhanger at the end of the first chapter.

This was overall a great story but as good as part 1 as it could of been longer as proverb with the ending. Still would like a continuation of this and off will's and Sheldon's story. Keep them coming

I loved the story, but I have a few minor issues such as seems to be a little rushed and it didn't have quite the depth did as the first part of the story had. Overall very good story. I would like to see it as a series, but I know the writing process doesn't work that way.

Giving it 3 stars because I very very very much loved the concept. However the execution was pretty bad. Rushed doesn’t quite sum it up. It’s like you had a partial outline of a story and bits of dialogue, and then decided to just write it down before you forgot it. And then for some reason, you published it. You could have had something pretty fucking awesome here. Like I said, LOVE the concept