All Comments on 'Blue Snow'

Before reaching the end of he story, I thought about how it was developing. I was waiting for the Exhibitionist Voyeur element, then I realized it was in Noah's surreptitious viewing of Jesse's camming. So romance? A May-December thing blossoming between them? The idea that he would stumble upon her cam site, given the thousands of camgirls out there in the world, seems too far-fetched to me. Anyway, I thought to myself that my personal preference would have been a more organic progression. Living alone together, isolated, maybe they catch glimpses of each other in partially undressed states. But I accept stories as they are written and won't challenge the author's choice simply because it doesn't appeal to my own tastes.

But a sweet tail of love turned quickly dark and turned into rape and murder. Again, my own tastes run in the opposite direction. Personally, I don't find anything erotic about rape and murder.

So, the story left this reader feeling a little horrified. I'd like to suggest that when you intend to introduce such a dark twist to a story, you file it as a non-consent story. Thematically it is more accurate and it gives the reader a fairer warning than the disclaimer you attached at the beginning.

You're a good writer. This one just wasn't my cup of tea.

I'd also file this in another category. Great writing and tempo, just to dark and brooding for me.

I'll write it again: great writing.

Wow, that went really dark, all of a sudden. Not in a good way. While the story is clearly crossing multiple categories, this needs to be in Reluct/Nonconsent. A huge trigger warning up front, at least.

The writing is quite good, but the plot arc is horrific.

This was going along just fine until the end. Dark doesn't begin to describe this story. I agree with the other commenters: It's horribly miscategorized.

Could have been a really good story: 4-5. Instead, it will get a 1 from me. I really hate when an author tosses in a tragedy just because. (Hated the ending of "Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon")

Took me from a great place to a dark corner. I really feel for Jessie.