by Camera Obscura
Nicely done, TB, you're living up to the promise shown in Chapter One. I'm finding Joanna an intriguing character, a blend of control freak and bully but with the occasional flash of vulnerability. I hope there's more to come---I'm agog to see where you're going with this.
TB,
You are definitely a master of anticipation. Joanna is a wonderful tease. I love the way she can reduce the normally confident Zara to a quivering mass of jelly. And kudos to Zara for giving Joanna her trust.
Looking forward to more!
-WP-
Great second chapter and buildup of (hoping) more to come. You have built Zara’s character up nicely and I look forward to discovering more about the mysterious Joanna. You are definitely headed in the right direction. I want more!
This is excellent. I love the characters and the slow buildup. I love the way that chapter two delivers the payoff that chapter one promised, and really, really want to see where this goes. TB, you rock. Thanks for sharing, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Thank you so much for the encouraging feedback. The positivity is great, but what’s really heartening is that the mystery of Joanna has been picked upon and that the build up of the story is appreciated. I’m glad there are folks enjoying reading Blueprints (almost?) as much as I enjoy writing it.
M
I love the story, on edge for more.
to be taken by an older woman, under her sensual control is such a high, willing to do anything for her, oooooooooo
thks again, your super
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I really enjoyed chapter 2, it was so erotic. I can't wait for chapter 3! Thank you so much for sharing this with us!
Beautiful story. I loved part one, the build up, the tease with that lovely moment at home in bed.
Part two has delivered on the promise. When Joanna says, "Good Girl" I feel little flutters in my chest.
I look forward to future installments. Now time for a cold shower. ;)
I'm happy this seemed to deliver on what I attempted to set up in Chapter 01. The third chapter is now in the queue...
Thanks again for the comments. Much appreciated!
This is just unfeasibly hot. Thank you for writing my near-perfect fantasy.
Here I am arriving late to the party. Maybe you will see this comment anyway. That was intensely erotic, so red hot. Made better by the journey us readers were taken on. I believe there are those who want to rush through stories to arrive at the sex scene(s). What they miss is that just as prolonged foreplay leads a more intense climax the slow burn leads to a more satisfying conclusion. Thank you
Creativity displayed in this piece is seen in cohesive potline, I really like how time shifts makes a pleasant continuum. Characters fantasies are shown in truthful show of realisms. As a reader, I liked this wonderful story. Portrayed identities and motivations are reinforced with hints and not plant aggressive statements. Tension building and premise of absolute submission keeps giving curiosity to read further. The Profoundness of these two chapters of writing started to impact my understanding of good writing. So far I didn't native anything that displease reading experience.
Thanks C. Obscura