All Comments on 'Bombs Away'

Going to have to call demander and Griscom the Dark Twins, ffs. Not that's bad, at all. An author most famous for children's books, Roald Dahl, wrote some deliciously dark short stories. One even had a LW angle, where the husband came home and asked the surprised wife for a divorce. She answered in true LW fashion and BTB, literally. Now that I think of it, that short story was an LW tale ahead of its time and came with the BTB built into it naturally (iirc, it was called Lamb To The Slaughter).

I'd have wedged a walkie talkie into the hatch so we could converse a bit

A very average story. AA+

This is barely one page long but you'll be hard pressed to find a more boring and predictable story anywhere on the site. Don't believe me? Try this test: take a totally secret impregnable, escape proof underground bunker, built by a one brain cell hick family. This bunker is inherited by a violent redneck psychopath, married to a cheating slut who uses the bunker with her lover. Go on, guess the end! I bet you can.

Don't like murder stories. Expose her cheating and divorce her. Killing them is too much and is not proportionate to what they did. Also no confrontation lets this down.

All's well that ends well!

5

Terrible and thoroughly deserving the 1* I gave.

Personally, I would have just left the canned food & jugs of water there...

A bit of false hope works wonders.

Pretty brutal, and the protagonist comes off as a bit of a psycho, but a well-told tale overall.

A true psychopath for the main character is a problem cause there is no emotional content here. Cold ruthless murder to prevent losing some stuff in a divorce? Not sane.

Only real weird factual point was that he allowed this cheating at the bunker to go on for 5 weeks! Being a youngish couple, they hadn't had sex together at all during this time... and nothing had been said! Not really believable. The rest was an interesting story. Cheers.

5* It's always a good thing to bury the past. Bwah-ha-ha!

Before locking them in, I would have left them a message somehow to tell them why they will dy down there. More punishment for them.

Only 3* because I don't like killing with very good reason. And just cheating without openly humiliation like in all the real cuckold-stories isn't one.

This is one good writer.

But this was gruesome.

Don't care much about the cheaters except I'm not into murdering anyone.

Just divorce them and move on. One can face judgement day easier this way.

I did fantasize of leaving them for one whole day in that bunker and letting them out the next day.

Not necessarily my cup of tea, but the writing was top quality and the story was interesting and, despite being pretty obvious where it was going, was well structured and well paced. Good job.

BTB. Bury the Bitch!

Humorous story.

As a child of the era when people turned their basements into fall out shelters, I can accept the existence of a hidden one near a cabin. I am less able to accept one in Florida. That said, it was a novel story but I never quite got into it. I'm wavering between a 3 and a 4 because it was well written but lacked the sparks that a longer story might have been able to include.

A nice story, you told it well but personally i feel the people in the story needed more personality. You seemed to talk just as much about the canned goods as you did the cheaters, again just my personal opinion. I iked it, above average but not a loved it.

Any asshole who believes that adultery is punishable by death is either mentally depraved or deserves the worst punishment that law can give!

He is a sociopath and if that’s how he reacted, no wonder she was cheating on him. He was a murderer just waiting to happen.

Sorry but I have no respect for guys who murder their spoilage for cheating. They rank with child rapists and parents who kill their children.

Satisfying. But ultimately kinda boring….because it totally lacked any emotion.

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These stories work when the tale contains raw emotion…especially in exchanges in conversation between tne various characters. There was nothing in this thing. It was a rather boring and dry recitation. Yeah….the way the cheaters were dealt with was novel. Even clever. But not enough to save the story.

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2 **

Really did did not care for this story. Cold blooded murder is a lousy way to get revenge. Now if he had put a couple bags on the hatch to keep it from opening and wait a day and then let them out when they'd be sick off their ass, that would have been different. Plus how could he claim he did not own the place yet was making improvements, etc. holes in the plot.

Hilarious!!!!

4/5

No way is adultery a capital crime. But thanks for the history lesson anyway.

Sorry, but that's extreme. I don't care for murder BTB. 1*

I actually enjoyed this one.

Just FYI, one foot of concrete or 3 feet of dirt will block about 90% of radiation. One foot of concrete plus nine feet of dirt will block 99.99% of radiation. That bunker could probably withstand a surface burst of a megaton bomb half a mile away.

The "sophisticates" are obviously bothered by this one based on the scoring. "What we have here is a failure to communicate." What many readers here can't understand is that betrayal of vows is not a relatively trivial thing that just "deserves" separation and some loss of assets and, perhaps, reputation. Most of the readers here, and a majority of people in what used to be known as "Christendom" are Eloi. The Morlocks are coming for you, and won't that be a surprise. Every civilization that allows itself to become degenerate pays a price.

Way to dark for me. Dark can be good if it's done right but needs more build up.

Now that was a different dish...served cold! Too bad we didn't get the wife's last thoughts...maybe a note from hubby next to the gallon jug.

Not erotic. Your writing talent is wasted on snuff/revenge fantasies like this.

About as perfect a crime as could be. Have to admit that I would find it very difficult to avoid returning just to see the aftermath.

Thanks for the oasis in the desert of cuck-tales.

☆☆☆☆☆ pour encourager les autres

Oh this one was so original.

Kudu's to the author. Justice was served with copious co1.

If only....

Well done!! You certainly got the panty waist crowd crying about how horrible this was. Suck it up cupcakes and let it serve as a warning not to fuck with a married woman. You never know when you'll run into a husband like this that doesn't take any bullshit. Who are you to decide what deserves capital punishment?? You might just be the next one in the hole for eternity.

Well written story. Yes, it was pretty dark but I have no problem with it. You shouldn't fuck with a married woman and a married woman shouldn't fuck around on her husband. Some husbands seem to get extremely offended by that.

Worthy of 5 stars

Cold and dark, this story. Well done.

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He'll wait another decade or two and then haul out their two mummified bodies and bury them deep... right back under the new patio. The cops would never think to search under it again.

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Don't worry about those who whine whenever someone dies in a story; they don't understand that matters of the heart can make a man crazy. It's okay if the wife excuses her betrayal by saying, "It was just a crazy thing I did, I don't know why." But let a man use that excuse and suddenly they get all holy and unamused. 5 stars.

0 stars - any violence ALWAYS gets ZERO stars

Technically, no major flaws so you get a star for that. No emotional content, which is not surprising as the "hero" is clearly a sociopath.

Cheating does not merit a death sentence.

This doest even count as dark. Its just a guide for 'How to murder your roommate'. And yes, she was apparently no more for him. He felt nothing before and after either way for her. How come she married him? His In-laws tried to call him and he sent lawyers to them? Who the fuck does that? I am always one for revenge, but it needs to fit the crime. Dont know how anyone could be ok with cold blooded murder of two people and in such a cruel way. Either suffocating or starving. He should have off'ed himself.

Not bad. Three stars.

Could have left the urine thing out. Suffocating or starving to death trumps a jug of piss.

so ur MC is one of those CHEATING> than cold blooded planned murder. unfortunately, there actual ppl out there like that. so in this case i didnt see any reason why these ppl were married. no emotion whatsoever, read like a manual on how to bury ppl in a bunker

4, not usually a fan of killer endings but that was pretty enjoyable. Effed up but enjoyable.

Would love to hear the wife's side when she realizes that she signed their death warrants.

I loved this story, keep up the good work.

Strange tale. And surely he would have wanted his wife to know that he knew. For her to realise why she was going to die like she did. Very dark.

....but on daaaaark stormy nights, occupants of the cabin swear that two ghostly apparitions rise from the ground and have sex on the lawn!

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You ably covered all the classic criminal screw-ups, such as cell phones, DNA, etc. 5/5!!

Uh no, adultery doesn't deserve a death sentence. Just get over it and realize you should have had a prenup.

At least you were thinking out of the box on this one.

A tad too disturbing but you were aiming at the chest thumpers with this. Still a fun story, in a way, even with how dark it was.

God help me, but that hole great story made me chuckle. The two cheaters wanted to spend some happy time together in the bunker, and now they can be together forever. I hope they got one last good boink in before the realization of their predicament sank in. I think that they would know who killed their worthless, cheating asses. I know that there is no death penalty for adultery, unless the cheater's spouse decides there is.

For the record, in real life I have never buried anyone alive, except perhaps in some sand at the beach. But never that deeply. There's never sufficient time and too many witnesses.

@tangleweed, thanks for the comment. I don't think I had seen this @demander guy's stuff before. I'll have to check him out!

Just to straight forward to get me excited...3*

Out-fucking-standing.

Almost no dialogs. No emotions. Just a psychopath description of how he got away with murder.

Didn't like it.

Story but really dark, sad. You write well.

Her side would make a good short

Oh so predictable, unexciting and yes, perhaps a little dark. The time spent reading this will never be redeemed. This was not a cuck tale nor was it a revenge missive as neither of these had any effects or aftermaths explained or documented in any way. This was just a two dimensional lecture on what could be imagined in an unrealistic mind.

It takes an appalling creature to imagine this sort of thing is acceptable.

Don't do the crime if you can't do the time. Thanks for the effort.

I love short, sharp shocks like this one. Especially in the desert of cucks (as the previous anon put it).

The darkness in this one was a wonderful palette cleanser.

One of the best BTB's.

Good unique story. But also more realistic since people who are cheated tend to lose it and get emotionally twisted. Don't cheat, simple, stay alive. You want to fling around, fine then divorce or separate.

Short, to the point and original...This saved the day! 4*

While the story is well written and told in itself, I cannot make friends with murder as revenge. But that's my problem!

I can't believe some of the comments let alone the story, just how many sick fucks are there in the world, I am no longer surprised by the amount of senseless killings in the world and I think we only have to look at the brainless commentors to know those responsible.

You know who you are so don't try to justify it, admit it, you're sick and need help.

Quite sick, if you think this is entertaining or OK you really need to take a serious look at yourself. Reading this I'm not surprised at the amount of sensenless violence in America. Perhaps you should do the World a favour and anialate each other and leave the rest us, civilised human beings in peace.

Brilliant. I can't begin to tell you how much I appreciate this story. To think of what went through the wife and her bosses minds during their final moments. They had to know what was happening and who was responsible. Just beautiful. Such a refreshing change from the usual cuck crap on this site.

Very good, Cold but very good!

I'm not much into stories where someone dies. But thanks for writing it.

Good luck with your next

Cold..brutal...but GREAT!!!

5 stars..

DOL

Had a little problem with some delicate flower(s) apparently complaining to the Moderators about this story. Fortunately, I was able to prevail upon them by showing stuff way worse on this site, which is kind of sad. Heck, the fun part was tabulating that 18 of Papatoad's 100 stories involve some sort of violent end for the cheater(s), with more than one car bomb, come to think of it, and several Mob hits. And I like his stuff.

I liked it... a lot. The only thing better, would have been some sort of an intercom system he could have tapped into, to let the lovebirds know, what was in store for them! Then disconnect it, before you leave. Sometimes we forget, how fragile life really is....

5 stars!

Wayyyy too short. Just loved it.

Wow!

The comments from the overly sensitive pearl clutching snowflakes are more amusing than the story. Gruesome, man. But not particularly offensive to me... play stupid games, win stupid prizes.

Reread it, upgraded it to 5/5, just too good.

Good tale LP

Cold-blooded BTB tale. 5 stars!

That's a bit grisly....

I loved it. 5 stars!

I don't understand the comments about violence. There was no violence in this story. Husband was merely ensuring that the lovebirds were not disturbed during their intimate moment. He should be applauded for his consideration and compassion.

Brutal and oh so good. Wunderbar!

Hey dummy! If it has an air tight seal, how are the occupants going to breath! The more people in the sealed bunker, the sooner the oxygen will be depleted.

Ummm… that’s the point. It specifically says he doesn’t know if they ran out of oxygen, or water.

And it was “sealed” because Grandpappy designed and built the ventilation system poorly, so it was always poorly vented.

Found this an interest way to solve 2 problems at the same time. The wife got to be with her lover and made the bomb shelter safe.

Thanks for writing. Enjoyed the story.

To see a perspective from inside the bunker on the day of their "accident".

amazing story , thanks for this !

Got give the guy credit, didn't screw around at all and solved the problem quite simply.

They are sheltered from the wrath of the offended wife. She could have gone Bobbit on him

Akin to Edgar Allan Poe's "The Cask of Amontillado" Nicely done!

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 Dammmn! Good btb. Short, sweet, and to the point. Would've been fun to know their reaction when they couldn't get out and the air went stale.

The jug of urine was stupid...

-jaye-

It seems the B in this BTB means Bury the .....

If the bottle of his yellow DNA fluid had a cap he could be identified later so that was dumb like the smart guy below said.

The ill fated fuckers would also leave notes on paper and walls accusing the only other person that knew about the bunker of trapping and murdering them.

3/5

Hahaha....good riddance to cheaters

Disturbing imagining the prolonged, desperate, and frightening death. I have too much empathy to enjoy this tale, but it was well written.

much like Poe's "Cask of Amontillado"

A mean story but well told.

CINCO ESTRELLAS!

Well written but a horrid story. Their deaths must have been harrowing. Uggh. The MC is a murderer.

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