All Comments on 'Borrowing His Body'

Good story idea, likable characters - please keep going!

:-)

Really not sure why this story isn't rated "hot" yet - it gets a massive 5 stars from me. You write with great pace and style, not to mention the sexual tension - imagining a jock in a twink's body dildo-ing himself to massive orgasm was too damn much! I pray the rest of the story is coming soon.

A very well written first story. Good story line and a format a bit different from the usual. This is first rate pornography and that is not easy to acheive.

5 Stars for sure.

Wow, superb first story! Don't stop writing! I can't wait for the next part! Very hot! :)

You're to blame for my excessive use of exclamation marks, I refuse to be held responsible ;)

A very cool idea used well!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Really like where this is going, hope you continue!

Original & fun! Am definitely looking forward to more.

And also, kudos for making the two guys sound different. Too often alternating POVs sound as if it's the same person speaking, but you've succeeded in presenting two distinct voices.

Fabulous first stab, and you nailed it. I like the concept of the body exchange by two guys who secretly want each other, and you make it sound believable. I also like the humor and character build-up. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Please continue as fast as humanly possible.

Please don't stop here-!!

Love the way you are writing from both perspectives.

This is awesome-- better than some writers on lit who have tons of posts. Keep it up, cause I love it. And... are you *sure* you've never written before? ;)

Bit of Literotica advice: pay no attention to the scores, just write because you love writing. The scores dont make sense to me at all and i've witnessed other writers going into meltdown because their awesome stories did not get the rating they felt due, and yet the comments they received were encouraging, flattering and apropos. Regard your comments, not your score :)

I think u did great right out the tunnel. Look forward to what's next with these two!

I absolutely DESPISE this type of format. I don't know what else to say except that it represents an inability to weave a story, and incorporate dialogue and plot and character development, without resorting to this "split screen" gimmick.

I like this format, especially here where the characters are supernaturally switched with each other. It makes sense to tell the story from both perspectives, as they are both dealing with profoundly bizarre, literal "out of body" experiences

love this story.

Love this story! I hope there is more! I wanted to keep reading! You should make it a novel, I wouldn't be able to put it down. Probably because I'm a twink that dreams of finding a jock haha

I thought that this was a great story, especially for your first time! It was original, engaging, and well written. I can't wait for more.

Absolutely love it, can't wait to read more!

You have to hurry and update this because it's one of the best well written and interactive stories i've ever read. You're one of my favorites now :-)

Very convincing, fun and hot. I hope they are back in their own bodes the next day, and then have to spend a few days being embarrassed before the next switch happens. I predict that you will have a great success with this story if you keep up the high standard of this first chapter. Especially if they manage to have sex both when switched and not.

Only one thing you got wrong: Nobody can recognize their own voice from the outside, unless they have heard it on tape quite a lot. The way you hear yourself sounding when you speak, is totally different to how other people hear your voice. Try recording yourself and listening, then you'll know what I mean. So Jack would not have recognized the voice on the phone as his and vice versa. And you missed the chance of having fun with "God, is that how I sound to others?" thoughts from both guys.

Please put out another chapter that was fantastic!

weird isnt the word.

loved every word of it

i love love love Jake inner voice, so true to form and realistic. very good work. a bit of a slow sort-of awkward start but you really got going on page to. i'm so looking forwards to the rest of this

I always love revisiting this particular story.It has such a lovely twist to it and it remains refreshing no matter how many times i read it.Wonderful

Very interesting so far, please update whenever you can!

Awesome concept, really looking forward to see where this is going. 5stars

the story is Fabulous Marvelous. Love from a Greek (= Macedonian). i want more and quickly.