All Comments on 'Boston to Birmingham Ch. 05'

Don't love Gwen or Anne as much as I could, but, this is not my story, and people are not perfect, rarely even are fictional people perfect.

Really good story, recommended.

Almost enough romance

Gwen is is still somewhat-to-pretty entitled, from time to time, but is more of a good egg in many ways.

Much like his other stories, the wife behaves like a total bitch to the husband with the loss of respect being the key component. Once free from her abuse, the husband moves on. It’s only after she sees that he didn’t fall apart that she begins to think that she may not be as perfect as she thinks.

The problem with these stories is that the wife somehow manages to change into something she never could when she was married. Leopards don’t change their spots. In the end, did she really change?

Didn't take the white cunt Gwen to jump into plans and bed with Anne. How fucked up was the Anne angle. Really white trash sleeping her way

Thank you. This is one of the best stories I've ever read on this site. Of course they were eventually going to get back together, but it's the journey that was fun. And lots of interesting side characters too.

Didn’t stop her from sleeping with at least two, perhaps three other people… the part where she was so happy she took Jimmy home was unclear.

Brilliant. I thought we were getting to the end, but no.

I think this is the best love story I've ever read on this site. Thank you for the joy it gave me, I wished it would never end.

I loved this chapter, and how Gwen finally took what she wanted.

OK Annie is predatory but well done Gwen. You stuffed up and sought redemption and earned it. I never have trusted bis.

Only gave it 4* because the stupid lesbian Captain is still in the story and she kissed Gwen. Absolutely HATE her character and I really don't see why she was even needed for the story.

I have problems with the over exuberance of spending, it betrays a certain attitude to money and people. Some people can't be bought and behaving like royalty bestowing favours on the unfortunate isn't really a good look.

Amazing story, amazing author!

I have to say that this is probably one of the top series on literotica if not the top one, brilliant writing from a brilliant writer⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I loved it and gave it 5 Stars. Now that's a chapter well worth reading. Even if it's past my bed time.

Such well composed and written chapters. Just realised there’s another one so no time to write more praises!

I absolutely LOVED this story!

This author has written many great stories. Yet, they all contain grammatical errors. One final read thru and the errors should be obvious.

To say Hardy Wilkes is and was a bit of an Asshole is an understatement. To say Gwen Cannardy is a party girl at heart and a bit of a slut equally an understatement.

To say two imperfect people can be perfect for each other in this case the understatement of the CENTURY 🤣🤣🤣

Disappointing; too lengthy, very questionable premise, and absent closure on some points of interest.

Love it

Thank you, I think it's the best part. But... I can't wait reading the ending.

What did Gwen learn? Drugs got her a number of personal gratification, first in Paris then in her marital bed. But they also got her in very deep poop!!! Did she like the consequences of her drug use? And now she uses drugs on her ex?

Again, please get a MUCH better editor!!!

Gwen DOES NOT deserve a LOVING WIFE ending. How about a car accident of some sort that will take here back to Boston for permanent therapy?

A VERY reluctant 3* and all of it goes to the good sections of that part.

BJ

Still great.

I am really enjoying this story. I can identify with Gwen having culture shock from moving from New England to Birmingham, AL. I am a transplanted Yankee to the South. The little slower pace of life compared to Boston; the genuine, & welcoming hospitality of family & friends; great weather (yes, you do get used to the hot summers particularly b/c the winters are so mild (it's Feb 23rd today in Birmingham & the temperature is sunny & 76 degrees; etc.

I think her father made a wise decision to relocate her to the Birmingham branch from Boston.. After blowing up her marriage, a change of scenery away from all that is familiar & reminding her constantly failures, etc. She was only 28 years old when she destroyed her marriage. Her father (I assume) was hoping she could make a new start in Birmingham; her grow up & learn to make better decisions.

As some readers have mentioned before, I don't think the scene where she drugs her ex-husband fits with the story or would be something that Gwen would do. No matter how desperate she was I don't think that is something her character would do. Why? (1) She cheated on her husband the first time in Paris. While she & Jerry were partying & drinking, Gwen was still under control & faithful until Jerry convinced her to have some cocaine.

The drugs pushed her over the top. (2) She officially blew up her marriage when she invited Jerry into her condo to share some new champagne he brought by...even though she knew her husband was arriving shortly. Of course, the champagne was spike with a drug cocktail & in short order she was screwing Jerry in her marital bedroom.

The two worst moments of her life involved her using drugs. But irregardless, Gwen (just like Jerry) secretly drugs her ex-husband, ties him to the bed & then, screws him whether he wants it or not.

I don't think. I think that drugging her husband would remind her too much of what Jeff had done to her. She wouldn't have done it.

Read the series again. This is one of the top stories on this site.

This has been a great story.

Some instructed criticism. It does not fit that she hadn't lost her love affair and has even worse that she went home with the assistant DA Jerry after the after thee forum dance. That part absolutely does not work and it was a real mistake and going in that direction and you watch that and not do it again because everybody's come in it on it. The more you kept it real and on track and consistent with reasonable good sense the more you did that the market who had sucked in.

Also I personally resent the introduction of a black male being the best book of any white woman's life that's a total myth that's absolutely stupid it's racist and I wish everybody would just stop doing it.

OK those are my negative points on my positive side dempt hastic Turkish development great stray line evolution

Superb execution of Southern and northern culture.

A thorough enjoyable read

I mentioned earlier that you write better than most of the authors in literotica loving wise and I truly mean that. Rochi fapid the sexist not an appealing thing but when you put that kind of sex and love and Passion together in a real relationship it has seriously positive impact.

You did that pretty damn well.

Again a great story please keep him coming.

- Hi country rider

qhm1 killed this story in this last chapter. I've seen it many times when a writer can't make a reconciliation work and have to find some ultimate measures to sell it to the readers. It didn't work for me at all. Well written, interesting plot to a certain point, but this last chapter killed everything to me. first, the reformed spoiled girl get drunk, involves in a quasi lesbian affair. And then to win her husband back she drugs him and manipulated him proving that she didn't change or love him at all. Crappy ending. The first four chapters deserved a better effort.

The end is quite fitting. Gwen considers Hardy beneath her for a good chunk of their marriage and finally tops it by cheating on him. After that, he won't consider a real relationship with another woman because apparently he couldn't find what he had with Gwen - were they not disrespectful enough, perhaps? And finally, their reconciliation is triggered after she practically drugs and manipulates him. But turns out that's what he was missing all along. These are some sick puppies. Clearly have the capability to do good deeds, as their actions show, but they're still pretty fucked up. Too damaged to make anything work with anyone else, so they might as well stay together.

I love this story, True love always finds away. These haters for them getting back together just don't get it, SOME people aren't perfect.

Thanks for sharing this, and dont mind the haters, its a great love story. (In my humble opinion)

Keep up the great work PLEASE!

I think it's time you stopped writing stories for literotica & started churning out short stories or a novel. This is a fine story, with characters well drawn, & a very interesting story line.

Drugging and Raping does NOT inspire TRUST!!!

Hardy can now change his name to CUCKY!!!

He is probably the kind of pajama boy who enjoys cuck stories. I think strong men must frighten him.

A solid chapter. An outstanding series

Why am I bothering. Hardy is is a psychopath. A high functioning one but still a psycho. He isn't worth it. He is a terrible and horrible human being. Gwen was bad yes but Hardy is way way worse morally. Oh and she is a bisexual now?

I sometimes question the rating system. Q has written some amazing stories but this one just drags on and on.

Redolent with the scents of jasmine and magnolia, and the sights and sounds of the character of the south, the way all imagine it to be. I really enjoyed this one from start to finish, and really liked the little potted fates of all the characters at the end.

A really good read!

Well done, sir!

You did it. You RAAC'd them. I thought this was a tribute to Steele? I'm sure you remember he DIDN'T RAAC them! You've dragged them thru every imaginable scenario and he still divorced her. And this chapter did nothing to make me think he changed his mind and could suddenly trust her. Well written but a horrible ending.

Marvelous story. Absolutely the best of the craft on this site and elsewhere. Massive bravos.

This was one of the best stories in here, 5 stars, I can't say enough how much I enjoyed it.

4 stars

I like the story (despite some misspellings), except I am unhappy with Hardy's reluctance to forgive and move, and his lack of contrition. Gwen's mistakes were not that awful. Her first session was was a mistake in having anything to do with Allen (but he was her colleague), but she did not intend to cheat and was under influence of drugs when she did have the sex. She made another mistake in having a drink with Allen the second time, but she was basically raped. It is not like Gwen was a serial cheater. Thereafter, Gwen recognized and repeatedly begged for forgiveness for the errors, and had clearly changed from the person who had previously disrespected Hardy and became a very good person. On the other hand, Hardy had smashed Gwen in the mouth and put superglue in her hair forcing her head to be shaved and dragged her by her hair. Hardy's violence was unconscionable. Yet, at no time does Hardy apologize or beg forgiveness for what he did. Hardy had an affair before divorce; but Gwen did not. In short, I like Gwen and think Hardy is a jerk who did not deserve to have Gwen return to him.

Theyve finally come to where i hope will be a complete reconciliation. Gwenn has proven herself imo and neither are hapoy without each other.

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i can see him not taking her back seriously, The old you cant unring a bell is true. If that to him is a line you cross and cant go back from ok thats a legit POV, Well written story but this kinda bugged me a bit for some reason.

Great story again still enjoying it looking forward to the next part. Thank you

I love the detail and description. A few minor errors. Overall well written, BUT...

The Gwen character has not fundamentally changed. She is still the same manipulative selfish immature woman started this tale. Hardy understands this but I guess he doesn't feel that it matters. Or that Trust matters.

Gwen's broken promises include starting a family, promising her father about not destroying Hardy, promising to stay faithful and forsake all others, living her life lonely in a prison of her own making, not having sex with anyone again, not having sex until her divorce is over, etc, etc.

She also says that Hardy threw her away. This is completely false. She threw him away by the constant disrespect and deliberately cheating on him.

She is still manipulating him, with numerous people helping, to satisfy her own selfish needs.

She loves him soooooooooo much that she cheated on him multiple times. Such an Expression of devotion.

I also don't like the girl on girl thing. Just why? It doesn't resolve anything and in fact adds another thing to hide from Hardy which is what got her in trouble in the first place.

And drugging and molesting him? That is NOT the actions of someone who loves you.

Finally it is frustrating that Hardy is going to put himself back in a situation that he knows is not right. He understands that trust is essential, that he can't trust her ever again, and still gets back with her. He deserves what he gets. Fool me once, shame on me, fool me twice shame on me.

Finally he is not to blame for her cheating. It is implied earlier that he was to blame for not being truthful about his past. This is BS. His past had nothing to do with what she did. His past never would have been brought up, except for her cheating. She doesn't lie about her expectations and cheat and none of his past matters because he had become a completely different person. Her actions broke him.

wimpy cuck shit.

Just shut up.

One of the longest wimp stories ever!

Obviously written by some kind of non-man or a women.

Q, I enjoyed this tale of love. I know the BTB guys hate it. I like a good BTB wen the woman deserves it. Gwen made some big mistakes and sacrificed her entire (shallow) way of life to redeem herself. In the end the focus on family was what really sold it.

Good job

With Hardy at the end. He folded for her physical beauty, setting aside what he knew to be her flawed character. She's not capable of fidelity and he knows it. She will proudly show him off, grow tired of him and wander. He deserved better. She deserved less.

Thank you thank you You brought them back together. With 1 more chapter you will break them up then do it again

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

Lost my interest in this chapter. The Waltons move to Bama. RTR

and, what happened to your proof reader?

I stayed up until 5:00 this morning to finish this one. Most likely the best one I've ever read. I'll be sure to read more of your stories. It's good to read a story where there is no wimps or cucks here.

The series was superb! Little things a publisher would surely have provided coaching to correct (or omitt) are all I observed as possible criticisms. I say this only to emphasize that I mean to compliment your story telling. I enjoyed it thoroughly!

wahoo thanks

The introduction of Melissa Sue was inspired - not only does it widen the possible identification targets (how many people populating LW stories can teenaged girls identify with?) but it cleverly shadowed the underlying question of Hardy, "can anyone get over their beginnings?".

Thus, it validates all of the trajectories of the earlier story.

Nice.

And the kinky sex was approachable too.

Green-something

(and seeing HDK screaming for bigger tits in the comment section was worth the price of admission as well.)

stop guzzling the jizz you suck out of the fat cocks you smoke - just because you have no 'nads doesn't give you or any clam the right to ingest so much semen.

Great story. I like this reconciliation. She grew up during the course of this story and has worked her ass off to get her husband back. Forgiveness does not make him weak. Whoever believes that "real men with balls" are the ones who never forgive, then I feel sorry for you. Everyone has done something that they would like to be forgiven for. If everyone worked as hard as she has worked for forgiveness, then they would have earned the right for a little redemption.

So suddenly, Gwen is a hedonistic practitioner of deviant sex? And it's a beautiful thing... NOT!!! Apparently Hardy is wise and all knowing; not a stubborn fool after all.

got to exist a gury boy writing cts

I was kind of hoping Anne would come down with genital herpes after her totally slutty stay on the island. She was truly, the good time had by all. She could never have oral sex again. Gwen could have come down with genital herpes in her throat. Gwen never really changed. She was still an exhibitionist, total nudity at an open beach.....just like Paris. She switched from Allen to Anne and cocaine to liquor. She still got off on the effect her body had on her daughters young friends.. I like your overall story, but you never convinced me Gwen was worth his love. I don't think the leopard ever really changed her spots...which is why she and Anne snuck into the bathroom to swap spit.....way to many discrepencies in personalities to get my sympathy.

This was always one of my favorite big words. I love your work or passion however you perceive it. I wish I could write like this. I have read "The Cost" three times and each time it amazes me. I can't get over it's symmetry. I always wonder how many rewrites it took to get the final draft. Me?, I would still be writing. Thank you for the time and effort it takes to produce such entertaining stories. Besides, it's hard to find fault with anyone who likes stories by DSQ, OHIO, and HDK.

Any chance of a followup?

He has some seriously dangerous demons still buried.

Good write.

Thx

Great writing cool story, but she is a manipulative selfish lesbo bitch and deserves death and dismemberment, first from your story she never felt she did anything wrong, the proof first thing after real divorce in which she beat him, goes off with a lesbo affair ,so we know she had a back up plan all along so no real commitment there! the divorce was always his fault she never wanted it for she the lesbo could never do anything wrong or see his side being a lesbo, why lesbo alot because if a man had a gay affair after marriage went this way you know it would be oh she avoided a fag there!

the other thing is no bi wives all lesbo or not ,bi are sluts waiting to cheat- harsh but true. You may be a couple but you aint married .

emotional...good story...but u really didnt need anne in this story

I'm not sure what 'clewer' means, but you're probably right, I'm not.

Want a big word?

Chronosynclasticinfindibilium

As always, thanks for reading.

QHML1

He isn't, just full of Bull Shit ! "1*" !

(PS> some of the "big" words he is using are out of context and he obviously doesn't know its meanings)

Yep, in a real good way! I have read many of your stories, and they are great. I'd be willing to bet money that you could write a really good western story. Just a thought.

The only possible result for two people who loved each other the way they did. Neither of them were perfect, but they were perfect for each other.

OldMarineVet

love this story.

Don't undestand why so many writers here spend so much time building up what appears to be a rock solid character only to fuck it up in the end. OK, maybe the character isn't likable maybe he's even a SOB, but that is what you made him. To turn around and have him act so far out of character is stupid and not even worthy of the most hackneyed writer. If you were going to have him wimp out in the end, you should have built that quality into his personality from the get go. Sometimes stories and characters get away from us, but you don't just pull shit out of your ass to fix it. You need to let them go in the direction they want and need to go. In my writing I have found that stories can be like children; we may think we have everything planned out, but they turn out to have a mind of their own. That is the next lesson in your evolution as a writer.

this is new twist for the raac crowd, reconciliation via rape??? you should have stopped at chap4.

I have to agree with mcmilwp, who wrote early on in the comments about the problems in this story. In addition to his/her comments, was the "grow some balls" segment a flashback? I felt jerked around in a time machine or something...

This could have used a second pair of eyes to smooth out the storyline, fix some of the grammar and punctuation problems and, in general, get the underbrush out of the way.

After a very long time I found a captivating drama series that I savoured. Will now read more of your work.

Keep it up.

Looking forward to the next

Chapters. Damn good story! Any siblings for Melissa?

So the impossible happened. Hardy and Gwen are together again. Will it last? Will they re-marry? Will the Eagles win the Super Bowl? I'm confident we'll have a chapter 6. Excellent work.

After four chapters of decent writing, lots of angst and good plot, what happened?

Poor, poor editing, - I had to look around several times, to find which 'he' or 'she' applied to which character!

Poor plot, - the presence of Crystal and her gun at the shooting was a complete non sequitur, the whole shooting event was so trite, Mills & Boone would have edited it out.

In summary, the whole chapter felt as if you we're trying to get out of the house as soon as you could. Perhaps you were late for a tee time? A tribute to DQS and HDK. No way.

Would have given it 10 if possible.

Great story, one of the best.

I hope it is not the end. You have developed some wonderful characters that have a chance to further blossom and grow.

Thank you for sharing and please keep on writing. So far, it was a most enjoyable ride.

Brujay

. . . the best, most satisfying reconciliation story on this site. Words like beautiful, sensitive, passionate, erotic, warm, sweet, earthy all apply to this story. Thank you so much for sharing your immense writing talent.

DP

It amazes me how well thought out the storyline has been in this remarkable series, as well as the writing.

Brought tears to his old man's eyes.

Well done !

Thanks for the read.

...but what the hell....you're the author....the creative side of the equation while I'm only one of the readers on the 'consumer side'! From my point of view, based on my personal taste in stories; the really good ones are those that make you "care' about the characters (whether for good or bad). The best stories are the ones that make it hard to leave (say goodbye to) the characters at the story's end. WE all know around here that wherever you'll leave it and 'them'....there's a well known author around hereabouts who'd say "Life Goes On!" Whether this story continues or not, PLEASE keep the stories coming...you're certainly one of the best ones!

By the way, just so you know....It's 4:55AM as I type this....and NO, I haven't yet been to sleep. SO, being a 'new suthna' (a born Yankee, with 32 years then spent in SoCal, now in Nothe Cahlinuh) ...I'll just be saying, "G'night y'all!"

The lez scene in the beginning kinda fucked it for me though. Which is surprising, cause those sorta scenes sort of make the world go round for me usually... I suppose it pissed me off because I didn't want that specific character, Gwen, to do that at that specific time. Anywhooo, the over all story was pretty good, with depth and development and interesting stuff going on. So good work!

Good story but very long and since its a tribute to we all know who i guess around 50 chapters are still remaining. So by the end of 2014 or 2015 the story might come to an end.

Not sure how another chapter would fit but I'll bet the author has at least one more surprise or three waiting in the wings. Thanks for writing.

I think it should be the end. It's a nice little tale just as it is.

A lot of writers here make the mistake of going on too long and end up just boring their readers. Knowing when to stop is just as important to a story as the plot.

I envision lots of good work from you. You have set the bar high and I will look with anticipation for more.

Good story flow and character development with nice twists.

Keep up the good work.

I hope this goes on. As many have said, there is still a lot meat on the bones of this story. You have done an excellent job of developing all of these characters it would be ashame to not see them finish there development

Absolutely magnificent. Very much the equal of DQS's stories. Thanks so much and please keep writing.

I have loved it and while it could end here I wouldn't mind it going on, and it would be kind of wild if ann was involved *wink*. A decent homage to dqs for sure (and gor the less than smart anon,dqs isn't a failure,he is still working on WWWM as a 4 novel set,if you can scrape up the money it takes to read them ya might want to go to smashreads and buy them )

starting to get a little stale. plus it'd be a happy ending.

You pissed me off when I saw "The End" at the end of the last chapter. I wouldn't be sad to see it end here, although I would gladly read more.

Reads like a motion picture. Loved it.

That one is definately a 5. And if you choose to continue it, I'm sure it will be great. It's nice to find a story that you actually look frward to more chapters. Such interesting characters......Got to be a way to bring them back together again.

excellent story keep writing

I typically give a 4 to the best on this site, but your character development earned a solid 5. You are very,very good!

Very gifted story teller. I have paid money for books not as entertaining. Keep of the good work.

I have said it before, I will say it again, it takes a gifted writer to be able to take the reader from hating a character to loving and rooting for them. Thank you for not taking the easy route and having them reconcile at the end of the last chapter. This was a far better ending. In the process, you redeemed Hardy as well. Bravo!

Knowing some of your other work, I wouldn't be surprised if Anne came back to be with both! I hope you do continue the story and Gwen really does show him how much she has matured and hopefully continues to grow and earns his trust. You made us believe she has socially redeeming qualities, don't trash her.

I think you should have numbered it 5a --that would have been a funny tribute to DQS1. Hope we get more--refreshing read