All Comments on 'Breaking In Her Naive Nephew'

Good premise.

But the use of the present tene is off-putting.

And you wrote: "...straight-laced..." It's strait laced.

The sex is somewhat rushed. Too mechanical.

Why wasn't there dialog about how he liked her body. And what he'd like to do to it? Abd what he'd like her to do to him with it?

And did he watch porn? What kind did he like? What kind of porn did he like? How often did he jerk off to it? Did it feel as good as when she gave him a hadjob?

Did he like kissing her pussy? The taste of it? Tonguing it? Making her cum?

Four stars.

Loved your story, can't wait to read the next chapter.

Loved it, looking forward to the next chapter.

Easy 5, great stuff, keep it up!

For your first story I'm impressed. I have no doubt you'll find a style and make it yours. Well written and edited. I enjoyed it.

@anon

What an embarrassing mistake you've just made. Straight-laced is a correct spelling of the phrase.

If you're going to try to offer technical tips, at least get them right yourself. Giga cringe.

more please

I’ll be looking out for the next chapter. Fluffy is going to get a lot of extra-curricular tutoring from his “mommy” when he get to university - hope his other studies don’t suffer!!

Doh, damn auto-correct - that should read Cliffy!!!! 😂

would like to see cliff being invited to stay in new York with his aunt

Absolutely fantastic! Can't wait for more.

Check out "God of Mischief and Lies" by FireFaery. You're in the same class (Best in show). I think you'll like it.

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1659737&page=submissions

I'm always amazed that people read X-rated stories and then complain about minor grammar issues. If you do, your sort of missing the thick, luxuriant, fragrant, stocking topped forest for the trees. I believe the hyphenation rule is generally compound adjectives that express a single thought and modify a noun are hyphenated. However, if they are acting as an adverb, then they are generally not (there are about 20 or so rules...) So "Her straight-laced older sister is such a sanctimonious bitch" is correct, whereas "Her older sister is sanctimonious and straight-laced." is both awkward and incorrect. But, then you'd probably want to spend your time talk with Auntei-Lexi, rather than experiencing Sexy Lexi....

Absolutely incredible, hits allll then buttons. Can’t wait for more!

Very hot. Will wait for the next chapter. Describe her heels in more detail please, like the colour, height etc.

Learnt a lot from lurking, didn't you! There's got to be more of this...

More please !!

Loved it, looking for more.

How much older is Lexi? A few or more like 20 years? Two different directions for the story...

Oh my Good, what a hot Story. In the next chapter, let Cliffy fuck her tits and give "Mommy" a facial

More!!!!

So hot! Thank you!

Please more.....

One of the best stories I have ever read on here. Amazing job. Please keep writing! I would love to see more of this story.

Wow wow and wow. One of the best. Hope mommy can have him clean her up after he finally gets to cum between her legs!

Gave the story five stars I hope you right more you have a talent

White-bread? Don't you mean white-bred as in breeding.

Try to write in past tense and not a jumble of past and present tense.

Or as someone said he hopes you right more - ffs imbecile.