All Comments on 'Brick Walls Ch. 01'

I'm intrigued by this story. However, you need to watch your vocabulary. Spellcheckers only pick up misspelled words, not words used incorrectly. Example: "auditable" should have been "audible" and "pasts" should have been "passed" and "past" should have "passed". These are basic grammatical errors. Mistakes like these can really disrupt the flow of a story. If english is not your strong suit, there are plenty of editors out there who can help improve it.

those little mistakes takes me away from the story, also you could have left out the part about jennie and charlie never becoming lovers... it would have been far better to leave the mystery there and keep us guessing... but the beginning is intriguing and ill check out ch2 when it posts

I saw this was your first story. Good first attempt. You will get better as you go. Please make your chapters longer. Definitely will read more by you!

i'm really interested to know what happens next. awaiting your next submission.

Happy Writing!

Very nice. Im looking forward to more. It would have been better if you had left out the bit about Jennie and charlie not becoming lovers. Hopeing for longer chapters too :)

It was becoming intriguing...