All Comments on 'Bridge Ch. 02'

Please!

You have created a wonderful world with a ton of possibilities, both sexual and action-wise, should you decide that that would be fitting. I also like how many details you put into this. I believe the best stories to be detailed to a fine perfection. This is one of them. While not as thoroughly explained as, say Going Feet First, yet, i can already somewhat visualize Bridge as a city. The only thing i would like to see a little more of, which you have plenty of time and possibilities for, is some character development. I get the general gist of Aerlin; a quick-witted girl, who is confident in herself, bot sexually and personality wise. She loves her job, especially the sex, and she takes a great deal of fun and pride in it. But besides that, i'm missing some finer subtleties on her characters. But like i said; A great story with a damn lot of potential

@jpz007ahren, very well, I shall!

@Anonymous, thanks for the very thoughtful comment! I too see a lot of potential for this setting, and I'd like to flesh it out as much as I can; hopefully I can make it detailed enough for your liking. I definitely agree that there's room for more character development. You've certainly picked up on the main traits of Aerlin's that I wanted to convey, but as you pointed out, there's a lot we don't know about her motivations. That's intentional on my part. I plan to eventually flesh out her backstory and character more, but I wanted it to come out naturally through her interactions with other characters and her actions as the plot progresses (and that goes for all my characters, honestly). I'm not a huge fan of info-dumps; there's a lot to be said for the implied over the explicit. But rest assured, we'll get to know our lovely leading lady more as time goes on! Thanks again, I really appreciate the feedback.