All Comments on 'Broken In Ch. 03'

This one went way off the rails. The new characters just detract from what's happening between Jarred and Darnell.

That was an unexpected turn of events

I only liked the gay parts, not a fan of the women being added in here. I was hoping the women were a way for Jarred to realize he preferred Darnell over them. I wish Darnell and Jarred kicked the two women out after Jarred took Cassie off Big D, and told the two girls that Big D was going to break in Jarred's ass, and Jarred finally got the fucking he needs from that BBC. Now I'm not even sure where this is headed.

I agree, this story went off the rails. First two parts were 5 stars. Last part,1 star. Of course it's the authors prerogative. It is their story after all. 😠

I was really looking forward to reading about Jarred getting thoroughly taken over and fucked by Darnell.

Oh well.

first two chapters were great had me hard as rock. then you went into this first person character. it just did not flow with the rest of the story. I didn't even finish it. you should have never brought it to first person end included females.. it was waay out of character I think for Jared to so his gay side in front of a girl so soon

I don't understand the change from guy coming under the spell of 'Big D' to player who likes it enough to suck him even in front of these girls, to guy in control who gets him a playmate for the night and who is a player like Big D. Is he dying to be a submissive bi guy or what? Totally different direction like another person wrote this chapter or you weren't sure where you're goin with the story.