All Comments on 'Brother's Best Friend'

You need to do more than run a spell checker before you submit something. Have someone who speaks and writes correct English take a look - this story will be much better for it.

That goes at the end of a story, it's prologue at the start of a story. This needs A LOT of editing, spell check, though not enough would be a start, punctuation and grammar needs to be worked on, my advice to you would be to get an editor, your story could be so much better with the improvement of what I've mentioned. I believe you'd be able to find one through Lit.

I like it so far...some technical errors as far as grammar go but it doesn't make it unreadable or less entertaining

I can understand it, so its all right. It's too short!

Heya loved the first instalment despite the few grammatical errors but when's the next coming??

Epilogue usually comes at the end. Did you mean Prologue?

Otherwise, good effort.

At some point you refered to the main character as Louise but then a few paragraphs later its Katie?

Same with the sister - first she's Brittany, then Bella.

So it starts as Katie, then Louise, then back to Katie and Brittney then Bella.... what are their names?

It's like Russian Lit where a character has like 5 different names.