All Comments on 'Burned Ch. 01'

This is a wonderful little story. The words paint a very clear picture. It also shows how guys really think. I'm looking forward to seeing more stories in this line.

Excellent premise, gentle development and imaginative start. Is there more? I suspect there is, and I for one, look forward to how the relationship might evolve. I will watch for another installment.

There is so much more to add with a chapter II. That would earn a 5.

Of course he could always claim a nocturnal emission - which it was, in a way!

you need to exoand your story good one

Awesome beginning, I hope that you're writing a love story and not just a jerk piece though. 5/5 for now.