All Comments on 'Burner'

What ????

I barely have enough concentration left to try to spell, not to speak of parsing meta.

Frankly - it looks good. Still, teasing the commentariat is not all >that< sporting.

Green-something

Maybe the most brilliantly written story I've ever read on this site. Your elusive mojo must be getting close to this star system, right?

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I do think, however, that you were remiss in not putting 'humor', 'satire' and 'lighten the fuck up' (hat tip: Vandemonium) tags on this. Yes, there will be those who read this and...

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5++++++++++++/5!!! Hilarious. More like that.

Excellent!

Wrong category, belongs in humor

Hilarious, and very clever. I think my smirk just broke into a full toothy grin, and my wife, eyebrows raised, is asking me ‘what, what?’.

Funny story.

Brilliant, hilarious, it pretty much says it all. In case there's any doubt, I love it. I do have one complaint. You missed losing her at poker, fucked on a pool table in a sleazy biker bar, and paying off a gambling debt in Las Vegas. Oh well, the world's not perfect, and you could always post an alternative ending, or some dickhead could. Keep it up.

Well, that was fun!

I love everything you guys write, but this one is too much for one read. I will try again and then rate it

Excellent, bravo!!!

Points for being clever, but there was no "there" there.

This is NOT the kind of story to read first thing in the morning, when the coffee hasn't kicked in yet, and the brain is still full of cobwebs. The wittiness of it pretty much escaped me, and yet I'm sure it's there......

Fun collection of tropes

Wierd butcute.

Sooo funny 😄 😭😀

Funny. Enjoyed it.

Clever. But may ruin some plots forever. Maybe all plots. D

Make this go away, Please. LP

not quite sure what you have going on here.

average rating but thanks for a different concept

very confusing, I guess I'm just old.

Started off slowly, then got pretty funny. A bit similar to the musical "City of Angels", if it were NC-17 rated and didn't have any songs.

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Not bad!

Clever ..thanks!!

the BTBers are still trying to figure it out. 4 stars.

Please help us in the transitions between scenes

Really stupid…not clever at all.Scores 1/5

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Every cliche in the book!

They Might Be Giants fan. 5 for the laughs.

Cheers!

WTF is this?

That was Fucking hilarious! 5 Stars

????????? Are you on drugs?

Love it

I am sure that there is supposed to be a point to this story, unfortunately it seems to have got lost in translation.

I appreciate that the author has tried to inject some humour into the story, but hasn't actually succeeded. Worth a try though.

One awesome page (very amusing btw absolutely loved it) laid out 99 percent of all stories here.

Yes ONE fucking page covered hundreds of stories.

I did enjoy this little Xmas fun.

An anthalogy, but badly done. The stories were way too short and often abrupt for it.

You must be high on too many BANNED drugs to come up with something like this chaos.

Liked it, even if it is all sorts of fucked up. Merry Christmas.

What was that?

Total nonsense but I loved it. Maybe I have a warped mind.

Hilarious!!!!!

complete stupidity.

Excellent, fourth wall totaled

Der!!

he won't know if he is talking with another or self. TK U MLJ LV NV

Heh, enjoyed that meta montage. Looks like a tough crowd out here, though.

Wow. I think you are going to get a lot of low scores for this.

On the other hand - I loved it. Something different to shake things up. But I have read Science Fictions stories from a young age and this type of approach is something I am used to. Reminded me a bit of Michael Moorcock's Jerry Cornelius stories from many years ago.

5* from me but I suspect those will be few and far between. Keep it up. we need different approaches on here and I salute your bravery.

Awful, start to finish, with all your weak, failed attempts at cute interruptions and replayed timelines shit. Just crap.

Bob showing his range again. There’s some ability there.

Funny! Yes LW has a tun of repeat plot lines, but as long as there are subtle differences, they are still fun to read. Poking fun at everyone is fun too, even if it has been done before.

Had me laughing out loud at it. Full points

Pretty funny but you missed a few tropes lol 4*

LOL..I love it and totally get it

Really different, & funny.

0 star - not my kind of story - sorry. I got bored at about the fourth rendition.

This story is severely underscored, which is unsurprising, given that it doesn't follow the BTB formula and isn't written in a predictable, linear, manner. No doubt many LW readers can't recognize a parody, even one written in cum on their wife's panties when they came home early.

It would probably be received better in the Humor category, where at least they expect a story to try to be funny. I kind of like it here, though, because it captures LW so well.

Second time reading, am more awake, and I find it extremely creative. This time I'll give it a 5. (the heck was I thinking the first time?)

Making the author the protagonist is a clever twist, but … This seems written for LitE authors rather than LitE readers. This feels a bit like all the Hollywood movies about movie production (swimming with sharks, get shorty, etc.). I get the jokes… but they are written for fellow comedians, not the audience… wait, wait, I’ve got more…

Thanks for the contribution. I look forward to the next one.

Funny!!!

Do we really need meta LW stories? That said, this one was clever enough to get 5 stars from me.

What a hoot! Well done 5*

Nicely done bit of LW trope-disrupting fiction with some seriously hilarious moments so big kudos for that. It put me in mind of the musical "City of Angels" and its Stine/Stone, author/character duet, "You're Nothing Without Me". I'm still laughing about the kids running from the swimming pool in a snow storm and beating on the sliding glass door. The low score tells us a lot about LW readers, doesn't it? Great job!

Worth it for the awesome one liners!!

How is this rated so low?

It's very, very clever, and fucking hilarious.

It has to be the crowd's collective IQ level. That's the only reasonable explanation.

Very funny satire--sorry that some of the commenters didn't get it, or don't have sense of humor.

Thanks, ohio

May be the funniest story every published on Literotics (I haven't read them all, so I have to hedge the superlative). Perhaps my favorite line: "I stepped back and caught her scratching her crotch. 'What?' she asked." Of course it needs the context of the previous lines, so I had to hedge with "perhaps." Does that make this whole comment a hedge fund? The story could also serve as an impromptu IQ test; the failures are anonnys (well, most of them, but not all). Oh no, I did it again! Sorry.

"It's yours," I replied. "Literally. It is yours."

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This comment is self-referential.

About the best parody of LW ever .... certainly the cleverest. But damn, the author forgot to add a set of twins to the tale.

Very clever,😂

Pretty funny.

Superlative!!!!11111 The ONLY honest story I have ever read in Loving Wives. This is... is uhhh, Loving Wives, right?

"Yeah? What are you going to do about it?"

"I'll dox you in the comments."

=====> Priceless. Was indeed superlative and meta until the cuck ending. Still.amazingly creative. 5 stars for the unique parody.

Hilarious parody. Thanks for the chortles. 5*

Very good but you missed out him changing the oil in his car. Every LV story in the US should have this !!!!

Upon further reading: You blasted the fourth wall plum (plumb?) through the troposphere into the stratosphere and still climbing. If it reaches escape velocity, it may go into orbit and we'll never be rid of it (just like anonys and those whose sensayuma was shot off in some war or otherwise lost).

The score baffles me. This is terrific.