by PersimmonPixie
I like where you're going with this, or where I think you are going with this. A different take. Can't wait to read the rest of your chapters.
I'm glad I met you online and you told me about your writing.
I must have been tired. I read chapter 2 and 3 today and literally got disgusted.
When people suggest to a writer to proof read and get an editor you NEED to take it seriously.
Don't rush to post just because; do your best to clean it up. Read it out loud to yourself.
If English is NOT your first language please find someone whose first language is English and have them proof it and fix it for you.
Want to read more!
Most readers appreciate a longer chapter, so keep that in mind for the future, but I think this was the perfect teaser chapter.
Careful proofreading may prevent the few errors in this chapter.
Very creative angle. The potential is quite great. Thank you for writing it and looking forward to future installments. You are a talented writer.
Would like to see where you are going with this; please continue.