All Comments on 'Can Everyone Tell? Ch. 03'

Another EXCELLENT story! You definitely have my vote as one of the BEST writers here on Lit! Please keep bringing your beautiful world to life! 5 Stars!!!

I gave 4 stars because you didn't finish the story, you left one set hanging!

Almost knocked off a star because of the golden play ... I didn't because you put a tag in there for it and I missed the tag.

(I might would've read this chapter anyway just to see what happened, but not a huge fan of that.)

@anonymous - what do you mean? "Left one set hanging"

To be honest, I thought little Sydney Westen tied it all up pretty neatly. Still, thank you all for reading and commenting... I appreciate it!

I thought this was an excellent story, EXCEPT FOR THE GOLDEN SHOWER (can I hope that the receiver will choke on it?). I think that the notion of switched at birth is a beyond excellent.

5*

BJ

Thanks. I really appreciate the comments!

What a great story. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Yeah, so I'm a guy... I won't apologize for wanting a big dollop of romance to go along with the hot, wild, monkey sex between father and daughter. And you delivered it with your well-written tale. 5/5*

Wooohooooo that Michael James guy... I wanna AI him for myself. Nicely written. VERY nicely written.

The thing about Tandy getting with some guy for a bit then going back to her dad was very strange. I mean given all the declarations and what not when they got together, I feel like it just undermines it all if she then can go with someone else like that. Why didn't she do the counselling before that? It just doesn't track and feels like bad writing to me. Not very plausible at all, all things considered. If she had expressed earlier doubts about her relationship with her father, I'd be willing to consider it, but she basically said he wanted him forever. At that point, you've committed; going back on it is just a slap in the face to your readers. But hey, no author is perfect; we all make silly mistakes ;)

Anyway, that weird bit aside, the rest of the story was great. Glad Tilda got to join the club, too.

Another excellent story, I loved it, the way you brought it all together, thank you, keep up the great great work.