All Comments on 'Can No One Shoot Straight? Ch. 03'

I lost track of how many times he entered up in the hospital with bullet holes, but still, five stars. I enjoyed this comic book action movie.

Every chapter has my brain hurting trying to follow the scene/plot jumps, yet I kept coming back for more. Good ending - I think. 4.3*

WOW Really loved the whole story BUT now and again you could have fleshed it out a bit instead of doing a lot of the story in shorthand leaving me going backwards and forwards to find where YOU were up to BUT GREAT work (jaybee196)

A confused mess. Why I began reading Chapter 3 after nearly going into a catatonic state staggering across the finish line of Chapter 2 only reflects my own masochistic tendencies.

God bless you for your determination to write; please pick a much simpler plot next time and limit your characters to no more than four--that at least will make it easier for us (readers) to follow the thread of your thinking and give you the attention your imagination deserves.

On to your next?

MLJ

I guess s story was there but I couldn't make sense of it. Sorry but this needs to cleaned up a lot to make it reasonable. 2*

There’s a really good story in there somewhere because it pops up in places. Your story structure and flow makes it almost impossible to follow. Characters and new situations pop up out of nowhere with no breaks in the narrative. Story reads like something being read by an auctioneer. Hope you can figure it out, because you could be very good.

A generous two stars for this mess masquerading as a story.

I suspect this piece is what a good story looks like after going through a shredder then randomly pasted together.

I believe this story needs editors with a good quantity of whiskey or a flamethrower. Personally, I’d opt for the flamethrower and the whiskey.

There's probably a good story in here? Needs an editor, with lots of red ink and patience to pull it out. This one was a hot mess Wolfie.

Confusing as to what is going on which makes it unreadable and not worth it.

Rambling mess get an editor and reread this

Good story but why Loving wifes 5*****

I got confused as all get out on the beginning of the first chapter, almost quit! Glad I didn't. Thank you for a great story and ending. Yes you either need an editor or start writing with Text Aloud. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!