All Comments on 'Candle Light Desert (Daughter) Pt. 01'

Hi Readers, this is me trying to write sex story for the first time. Please share your comments.

Couldn't finish reading this.

Language and structure are VERY IMMATURE.

PLEASE SOURCE AN EDITOR OTHER PROOF READER.

That you have tried to create a story cycled around incest is a good choice. We all have families so that creates a comfortable situation with which we can relate. Improved structure will make for easier reading. Easier reading will increase the potential for people to read your complete story.

Please try again; even the same story line.