All Comments on 'Caprice: Permission to Fuck Dad! 01'

It was kinda unreadable, so many pov changes without any indicators. In one sentence we had the fathers pov and directly the next sentence was the daughters pov.

Just rug out of my pants. Erotic!

It looks like Literotica lost all the formatting in my upload. I'll be reuploading to make it easier to read.

Look forward to the reloaded version, it was hard to keep track between characters and also the past vs present, flashbacks? Got the impression Sunny is a gold digger, putting away the costumes, then eventually no more sex, just wanted Cap to take over her role, bad wife!

Loved it! More please

Tempting, Erotic. Loved it !!

LOVED THIS!

Other than the quick POV changes, excellent. You know all of my trigger points.

Switching first person makes it confusing.

I uploaded the newly formatted story on 3/24 and it has still not been released. Hopefully sometime soon, folks.

The sex was hot but you really need to work on your POV issues. I had no idea from one paragraph to the next who was talking. Four stars.

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

I find this story fascinating with an interesting plot. Not sure if this is the re-write but I didn't have any trouble following it.

If I understood correctly, Cristos has two employees that are also fucking their own daughters, one of whom makes video of the fun. I can see chapter two going in one of a few different directions.

The three f/d couples getting together for same room sex. The f/d with the wife/mother who was relieved not to have to fuck her husband, having a six way that includes Sunny with that wife/mother.

If I was the author, there wouldn't be any daughter swapping for intercourse, just for comparing oral skills, both from daughters and fathers. Being a typically (?) repressed hetero male, I'm not into gay or bi men, so the fathers would eat out the other daughters, in each case to be told, "My daddy eats me best." Exploring each woman's reasoning, whether out of loyalty to daddy or if it's the emotional bond could be interesting.

But the fathers would give critiques about the different daughter's oral skills, suggesting that certain techniques from one girl be taught to his own daughter. That could cause feelings or not, depending on the girl.

The possibilities are endless. Needless to say I'm hoping for chapter 2, then 3, etc

Angus

Dude, you described two types of extramarital affairs. While I object to them in reality, I don't in fiction (porn and erotica, it actually turns me in). So I decided that since, while they are extramarital affairs, I like them in fiction.