All Comments on 'Cassandra'
by bleeep
- 50 Comments
roetilicaalmost 2 years agoIf you write more, a good idea to explore would be the change in Will. How do his friends react when he stops being so available, and turns down their requests. How does it impact their friendship? Do they blame Cassie for it? Is there someone with bad intentions in the friend group that Cassie becomes wary of?
SouthernCrossfirealmost 2 years agoReally sweet story with more than a bit of mysticism and a lot of love. I must admit that I was worried at first that Cassie might end up like her namesake, not being believed or worse, but Wil was a true counterpart and companion. I liked the end and am happy to leave them there but a second chapter might not be a bad idea either. 5* from me and a thanks for writing and sharing this story.
BruceWoalmost 2 years agoThis is a lovely story. It deserves another chapter or two. I would like to watch as they navigate their lives together. What job does Cassie take.? How does his relationship assist him with his job and other relationships. Cassie meeting his family etc. marriage, kids etc. so many opportunities for this story with these unique characters.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoAbsolutely have to have a second chapter , maybe 2-3 more after that 😎!
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoI’m a HUGE (spelled correctly) fan of ABBA. So I’m disgusted with myself, in that I only found 14 of the song titles on the first reading! Perhaps I’ll try again tonight!
So many missed opportunities! Her mother’s name could have been “Mia”. The bike crash could have resulted in an “SOS”. And Will could have been an educator, so Cassie could come to his classroom and tell his students about the time “When I Kissed The Teacher”. I could go “On And On And On”, but you get the idea!
This was a sweet, sexy, lovely story! You MUST write Chapter 2, in which a wedding happens — the lovers call each other “Honey, Honey” while they give each other a “Ring, Ring” and exchange vows (“I Do, I Do, I Do, I Do, I Do”).
Thanks for all the fun! And “Thank You For The Music” that is in my head right now! “So Long”!
Fireguy1956almost 2 years agoReally well-written and very enjoyable. A second story would be well received, I’m sure. Maybe go into Cassie and Wil exploring his abilities a bit more.
ravishmentalmost 2 years agoBring it on!
We'll be waiting.
I have a feeling Mom will be a big influencer in the sequel~
muskyboyalmost 2 years agoVery nice. I'd leave it here unless you bring Elaine into the relationship. I wouldn't disturb the relationship with Cassie and Wil otherwise, better to just leave it. I could care less about ABBA, sorry.
LudvigBlomSEalmost 2 years agoLove the story and it finisged enugh fullfilling to be judged as a story but another chapter would be welcomed ;-)
Erocratalmost 2 years agoI don't know much about Abba, but all good Swedish music seems to be death metal, so I tried to guess the titles. I found "Hate Myself", "Absolutely Nothing", "Knocking Them Down", "Thud", "A Bad Way", "Never See Her Again", "Losing Sleep", "Freak You Out", "Don't Want Me", "Shit", "Not Surprised", "Completely Wrong", "The Song Ended", "Not Succeeding", "Running Away", "Empty For Years", "No Idea", "Stopping At My Crotch", "Life Sentence", "Beneath Me", "Crazy Voodoo Bitch", "Fear And Understanding", "Break Your Brain", "Dead By Now", "Implode", "Big Mistake", "Not Wake Up" and "Into The Unknown". Am I close? I think if they're not song titles they should be. By the way, I'm pretty sure Fernando was not a Mexican. Never mind all that, bring on part II! Please!
Emotionalalmost 2 years agoI gave it 5 stars, but could have been amazing if you spread it to 20,000 words. Seemed a little rushed.
Mkcb69almost 2 years agoGreat story!
.... One minor thing (very pedantic, me!) the word is HUGE and not HUGH.
Otherwise... Brilliant!
Overcriticalalmost 2 years agoThis is a story of the supernatural. I have personally experienced events that cannot be explained by any natural phenomena so I am a believer, but this business of aura and virtual mind reading is a bit over the top. But if someone wants to write a story like this who am I to object. I always say, it is the author who decides what to write and if I don't like it, tough! The story did make me feel good and silly or not that's all that really counts. 4* for la feel-good experience.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoA very good story. IMHO, it's a bit _too_ smooth. It calls for at least one more chapter and some conflict/trouble to overcome.
Maybe finding somebody for Mom? ;^) ;^)
goodshoes2over 1 year agoReally says everything. Leave it as is and don't add more. 5 stars. Great job.
AllNigherabout 1 year agoI looked it. Didn't love it but liked jut. It needed conflict of some sort though.
Bob_the_Turtleabout 1 year agoThe beginning was novel and intriguing, and it did a nice job of capturing my interest. But by the end of the second page it lapsed into a plain, linear, everything goes well story. I would think a romance involving one partner who could read minds would be a little more difficult, humorous, crazy, unpredictable..something!
rbloch666 months agoIf there’s no conflict in a story, I tend to get bored with it. This time, I was hooked, all the way through, as I enjoyed it very much. That said; with no conflict, there is no resolution, and it leaves the story feeling unfinished. This story would be an excellent introduction to a much larger story where just about anything could happen. - So, I really liked it, but found it lacking. Still worthy of 5 stars for entertainment value.
dirtyoldbiman4 months agoExcellent, fun story. Yes to Part 2, 3. Maybe Will becomes more assured at work and advances quickly. Cassie has a baby(twins?) and the baby(s) show signs of being like her very early?
Anonymous4 months agoAbba's 28 songs in the story:
You owe me one
Fernando
there's something going on
As good as new
My momma said
Does Your Mother Know
Cassandra
Angel eyes
I'm just a girl
take a chance on me
I've Been Waiting For You
Why did it have to be me
Tiger
Does your mother know
Arrival
Love isn't easy
When all is said and done
Head over heels
I have a dream
I wonder(ed)
Little things
lovelight
me and I
No doubt about it
one of us
So long
That's me
Elaine
RD
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