by Hilaree
now i have to go look for the other parts. keep writing.
Good story but the grammer leaves a lot to be desired, you definately need to continue.
learn that ass is spelled wit two (s)'s...
Pretty good plot, but you should make more suspence. While I enjoyed it the reading was very abrupt; prolong the pleasure man :-)
Cheers!
You're off to a good start. Keep it up.