All Comments on 'Catering Girl Ch. 05'

What a turn of events. Did not see this one coming. Hope we can get the next chapters soon. You are a great writer.

Oh good, a happier "ending" (of the chapter). And, frankly, I'm kind of glad for a chapter without sex. There are some wonderful, character driven stories that I adore here on Lit where I am utterly wrapped up in the plot... and where I kind of resent the sex when it's the third or fourth time that chapter? OK, yes, that's what this site is for but... seriously, stop nibbling and tell us if she'll be able to come out to her parents?!? So thank you for a breather, thank you for a pause and character development. Let the bawdiness commence! :)

Wow! That was really good.

Had me holding my breath.....shoot out in Ballard , news at eleven....

Thanks again for another great episode and will be waiting to read the continuing story..

Just keeps getting better and better.

An actual story behind a romance, excellent work.

You got it right this chapter didn't need any sex in it al all can't wait for the next chapter

A good dramatic chapter. Who cares that there was no sex this time around? There is plenty to grip and excite most of your appreciative readers. Good to see there is more to come.

Well, that is going to be awkward. Last time she tried to do something for Jenn & Madi she got ghosted. Now that Jenn really really really needs help Whit must be feeling pretty torn about what to do and not do. If she tries to help will she get ghosted again?

Awesome & Explosive!!

Just a delightfully explosive chapter in many ways, however am certain that Whit-Jenn-Madi would have cheerfully skirted the 'massive explosion!'

Nicely Written & Definitely A 5*-Star Chapter🎉

Ok. Wow. Exploding apartments? Did not see that coming. This discussion with Edith was interesting though. I'm not sure it felt consistent with Whitney and her upbringing, I don't think she would have kept her opinions in silence, but since we aren't privy to much of the past, it was good. Especially the part about the recent catering job was more understanding than I expected after the Christmas story. This entire series is so good, thank you!

Very emotional and exciting chapter! I wouldn’t wish Jenn’s “bad day” on anyone. Rough day at work, sick kid, and too loose everything at the end. Wow! I enjoyed how this chapter flowed. You did a wonderful job illustrating Jenn & Whitney reconnection. From Whit’s meeting with Heather, too Jenn’s discussion with Edith. Glad to see Jenn’s hard work hasn’t gone unnoticed. It will be interesting to see where you take us from here. Can’t wait. Again, thank you for sharing your story telling talents.

Well that was a surprise! And gripping. Now the financial imbalance is even worse, I know how I'd resolve it. Eager to see what you do.

Another fine chapter that took a turn I wasn’t expecting. Breakups are tough on everyone, but getting back together with the one you love makes it worthwhile. Looking forward to the upcoming chapters. Thanks…

Such an incredible story. Totally unexpected but brilliant. I will be checking daily for the next chapter. You have done an incredible job of tying the it two very different world into one story. Like all of the previous chapters, I love this one as well. Well done!!!

When you started Catering Girl for us you said it would be a slow burn story and would take a while to build up, yet it has not felt/read that way. Your style and your way with dialogue and introspection actually create a page turner/can’t get enough feeling for me. Yes, you blend seamlessly erotic scenes in other chapters, but not missed in this quick paced, poignant, dramatic piece. OK, maybe missed a little, but inclusion would have seemed rushed/out of place in relation to where they were/are at the moment. As one commentator mentioned, the disparity is now magnified — let’s see how both Whitney and Jen respond. Thanks for sharing your creativity.

Very good can’t wait to read the next part.

Thanks... Can't wait for more!

You are doing an amazing job on this story. Couldn't believe how much you packed into the three pages of this chapter. One of the best stories currently running on Literotica. Thank you.

Wow. That's all I can say.

This chapter was so filled that I don't know where to begin. From the surprise about what really happened with Heather, to Jenn and Whit's reconciliation and reset, to the worst day ever. It will be interesting to see how things go forward from here. Jenn and Madi clearly need help, but can Whit help them in a way Jenn is comfortable with, and has she learned her lesson? The fact that Whit is able to ask the questions she did of Heather and Molly bodes well, now she just has to use what she's learned about herself. On pins and needles hoping for them!!

That was intense! Very emotional and well put the story gets interesting. Although it feels like in this chapter we are just jumping from one scenario to another like being dumped from one thing to another, unlike last chapters which were relatively slow and unfolding bit by bit. But still the story is amazing; with real romance and passion and didn't matter if there was no sex, because the intimacy was described beautifully

Never so bad it can't get worse. Strange how it can better at the same time. I am thoroughly jealous of your writing and storytelling skills, by the way. Wow! As my kid would say, "this story *slaps!*"

TBH, you had my 5 star rating when you used both "The Pass" by Rush and "Wish It Would Rain" by Phil Collins, two of my favorite artists, and "The Pass" is my favorite song by Rush. But then you went you wrote yet another excellent, emotional chapter in this story. It's good to see them back together, as a tragedy will often do, but now comes the big test for Whitney. They had a big time fight over her buying a car part, what happens when it's replacing literally everything in J's life?

Dramatic chapter that had me gripped wondering how these two would get back together. Didn't expect that explosive ending. Enjoyed your inclusion of lyrics from the late, great wordsmith and prog rock drummer extraordinaire, Neil Peart of Rush RIP

Never apologise for not including sex in a chapter, with the quality of your writing, the story stands as it is. It is refreshing to read something by an author who does not feel obliged to include a major sex encounter into every chapter, concentrating on the story itself. Thank you.

This was great, your best writing so far, but boy howdy was that a turn.

Read most of this with tears brimming my eyes....anticipation is killing me waiting for each next chapter...thank you

This was so rich in content. Much enjoyed the little side adventure to the Lube Job, where we got to listen to megan sing. i really wanted more of her story, and thought that might be in the offing. But nope....we went elsewhere, and it was all so satisfying. I so much admire your story telling. and never apologize for the lack of sex. Wouldn't have made this chapter better....it was perfect as it was....Thanks for sharing your imagination with us. it is a privilege to read your work.

I was really prepared to hate this chapter and I was a little anxious reading it. But it seems to be headed in the right direction, thanks for not breaking them up .. I can’t wait for the next chapter .. well done as always …

Holy shit what an escalation!

Great story. Glad Jen & Whitney are back together. Interested to see where it will go.

Right after the meeting with Heather, I was mostly hoping Whitney would cut ties and leave for a new town. She could leave a “you want to be on your own? Have at it, sister” text message to Jen on her way out. I will probably be happier with your story later on.

One thing I enjoy about your writing is that I care about your characters. Not only do the descriptions of them having sex engage me, the exposition in between hold my attention too. Well done!

looking forward to the next chapter to see what the after math is be well and safe a fan shayne

I'm loving the ride. This story is get never think it should be about sex without a great plot it would get boring. Keep the story going

Seeking lost plot, if found please return to author immediately !!

Wow! That was something! Nothing like a little near death experience to remind you who is really important in your life and what you really want. I really hope Whit and Jen learn to communicate, something we all need to work on, probably. I could really feel the pain from both, and it all comes from such a real place. Wonderful storytelling. Keep it up!

Fantastic chapter. Couldn't believe Heather, I wanted Whitney to start screaming at her and put her in her place but she stayed calm. The ending was brilliant and unexpected can't wait for the rest. Please hurry.

Jumped the shark. I'm out.

A terrible event can often make people focus on what really matters in life. This is their chance, they can work through it together, or Whitney can go back to her controlling ways...... a test indeed.

Fingers crossed this is the start of a new chapter for them full of happiness.

Where is the next chapter.....hurry please!

That ended much too soon. Excellent follow-up and great writing. Nothing like a bad day to put things in perspective.

Jumped the shark?!!! Are you kidding? Live one step off of the street for a while, and carry your life in your hands oh anonymous privilege. Shit like this *actually happens.* Been there, done that, didn't deserve it.

On one hand I found the drama over-the-top, but then reminded myself that it’s only my good fortune that has kept kind of violence at a distance. You are doing an admirable job of presenting two sides of a socio-economic balancing act between your major characters. Their deep affection left me teary, once again. ❤️

I am loving this story! Your writing is top notch and the characters are so real. You have quickly become one of my favorite writers here and I wish I could craft a story half as good as you. I thought the added drama was exciting and it sounds like the majority of the comments are in agreement. I wouldn’t worry about the few anonymous negative comments. Fuck em and keep up the wonderful writing!

That went a unique direction. I like it. The depth of Love is nice to show

when is poor Jenn going to have an orgasm?

A non sexual dramatic chapter. Nice to see Whitney being brought to book for her behaviour. There were enough hints before and it's now come to a head. Interesting that she bumped into Heather after all this time. And just as they made it up the fireworks started - wasn't expecting it to be that dramatic.

Another 5 ⛤ chapter

I could see why someone would feel like this was jumping the shark, I don’t think I have read a story on this site that is good at pacing emotional lows in their stories, they always push it one event to far and and it feels stuck in that valley so long that my mind set becomes “o cool another bad thing we get to add to the list”. I definitely don’t think it warrants someone just giving up on it but to each their own.

That's why I won't live in a building with gas. I don't care if that's the only way to cook gourmet food, I'll eat KFC and Macs and it will kill me, but slower.

Not enough "slowdown" now a breakdown followed and intense emotional scripting ...... You are fab ..... This story is truly a Masterpiece

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I'm… not sure I'm comfortable with this amount of violence in a romance story. Could have used a bit of a content warning at the start maybe? Seems more important than the no sex bit. Still, well written as all chapters so far, and it seems as the reader I’m safe enough with your writing. I was so scared when Nani was left behind and Madison or even the cop might have something horrible happened. Uh… back to mending hearts?

There really is no need to apologise for the want of sex (though here I can see why you might feel the need), as this is another 5 star offering. You write with sensitivity and a high degree of emotional intelligence.

I’m still waiting for something bad to happen to that girl who cheated on Whitney. What kinda screwed up in the head person does that? She deserves the worst.

No sex but who needs it after all that.

Is there more intriguing events and issues coming that may change directions. I love it when these two are together mainly for the reason of it's fairy tale kind of relationship. Well it's a good story hopefully it pans out for Whitney because Jenn still have an Ace card if Dallas emotionally and intimately breaks her from the clutches of Whitney which I think Jenn could easily be swayed if the conditions were right.

Nice story - think you should acknowledge Neil Pratt as the author of the lyrics from The Pass.

What a fantastic story. I could feel Whitney's pain when she heard from Jenn that Jenn needed a break from their relationship. Whitney's chance meeting with her ex: It was such a turning point for her. I can hardly wait to learn how this all turns out. Your character development is superb. I loved Madison's statement, "Yeah, but she is scared,"

Deus ex machina! A bit gut wrenching, that. Quite glad there was no sex, that woulda been too much! Hmm .. I’m assuming Jenn didn’t have renter’s insurance.

What writing!

From a simple rom-com to an explosive action movie.

The cinematic scenes are vivid in intensity. From a fear of rejection and personal failure to th apartment drywall exploding just above Madison's head.

Talk about a game changer!

Interesting writing. Jennifer is upset about how Whitney organised the party and taking control of Madison. And yet you wrote about Dallas coming back and Jennifer's mother rejecting her when she came out. And so this part just doesn't he'll with what was actually going on. Compared to the rest of the story this just doesn't make sense.