All Comments on 'Caught! #01'

Switching perspectives back and forth and around is not conducive to immersing your readers in the story you're trying to tell. Every time we have to pause and re-read some lines, or go back a few paragraphs because we apparently misread or missed a detail that caused the rest of the story to make even less sense, takes us OUT of the story. Again.

I was hoping for a leisurely wank, and instead, I got ...this.

nah

Not used to so many characters all fucking each other in one story but i got it, followed it no problem, so those that had to go back n read again wernt paying attention enough !

Anyway 3* story for me