by RomeoDelta
Not used to so many characters all fucking each other in one story but i got it, followed it no problem, so those that had to go back n read again wernt paying attention enough !
Anyway 3* story for me
Switching perspectives back and forth and around is not conducive to immersing your readers in the story you're trying to tell. Every time we have to pause and re-read some lines, or go back a few paragraphs because we apparently misread or missed a detail that caused the rest of the story to make even less sense, takes us OUT of the story. Again.
I was hoping for a leisurely wank, and instead, I got ...this.