by dresbach
Loved it during the beginning but it went down hill for me when he brought in buster and Jerome and didn't like that fact he gave up his alpha male thing and him not doing seconds to me it doesn't seem like something he would do and didnt care for her going into porn
The story took a couple odd turns along the way, but you wrapped it up really well. I still think the long term blackmail succeeds too easily to be even slightly believable, but I guess having a couple women attempt suicide or homicide on Jack would ruin the fantasy. In the end I gave 5 stars because it's a far superior effort to the normal dreck on lit.
it was EZ cum EZ go, life in the mid-stream. TK U MLJ LV NV
Is now almost as bad as Santos and is without any positive qualities at all.
I feel the total opposite. You ruined the fucking story for me. The whole thing that made this story work for me was he was wronged and looking to right that wrong. However he doesn't go forward to better himself instead he becomes just like Santos.
A nice tie-up to a good story. You did suprise me with the ending....Jack continuing his activities and he and Brit not living happily ever after. Good to see you didn't go the fairy tale route. A well written story, good job.