All Comments on 'Challenge 01 - Heather in the City'

Can't wait for more!

God damn good writing. You nearly fell into the “black men are gods” nonsense but avoided it by the skin of your teeth.

This is a literary masterpiece! There are some amazing techniques at play which produce a vivid picture that draws the reader in and causes both excitement and hunger for more. I just wish I was Allie's sister! Amy

This story is masterpiece

And the build up is so good

Hmmm can't wait for more, fantastic story as always 5 stars !

Excellent job so vivid in the description I felt like I was there. Looking forward to the next part.

Love the descriptions and the emotions evoked in this story! Masterful writting! Hope for more!!!

Another great beginning to a story. I wonder if Heather will meet up with any of Crimfolk's other beloved female characters as she continues her learning experience.

Heather may be the cash cow so unsophisticated and not understanding the motives of others who may not have her welfare under construction as she writes a dissertation aiming at pleasing black advocates and slamming white people in using her own family.

I just wish that I could stay and watch Heather as she got her story

What a really enjoyable read. It's great to be able to imagine as you are reading.

Your best work yet, very anxious for next chapter!

I'd give it a 6, but it isn't possible.

I can't help wonder what'll happen to Heather the rich endowned bitch during her quest?

Absolutely fantastic start. Harley better keep her on a tight leash. Would be very interesting to see Heather meet Levy. Perhaps get some overseas education from him.

Very good. More and deeper please.

A wonderful start! Very promising and we'll written!

I really like the way you tell a story. An erotic story not just requires sex but also the foreplay of writing which very less people have the gift of. You are one of those rare writers. An interracial theme is a very intoxicating one especially between a black man and a white woman. And you get the chemistry damn right. I congratulate you. Hope This will be a more than a ten part long story.

Wow! Stop giving away our secrets! The Meat Market has to be Jensen. Telephone Road. OST. Almeda. South Main.... Houston is well represented. Thank you for keeping it real.