All Comments on 'Challenge'

good story line. Way too many spelling and grammatical errors though.

more please!

You have a good story line, but it needs a little more beefing up, if you will. I'd like to see some editing and a stronger story line in future chapters, and a bit more reluctance, if you please.

i liked both your stories on this game. they did seem short though.I think you could easily have more chapters in the second story of the girl who ran.

I suggest another intallment where things don't go as easily for him, making him sweat and fear losing.

You might try an installment of him completely losing -one sided victory for the girl (or girls?) as well.