Nice storytelling. Please continue. The modern language and concepts in an ancient, or at least older, setting are a little odd at times, but anachronisms and fantasies can make agreeable bedfellows.
Shawn Williams is an aspirant author and YouTuber. He started writing on a role-playing website where people pretended to be vampires and all of his skill comes from that. He deeply regrets this, but hopes people enjoy his book(s) anyway.