All Comments on 'Chapter VIII: Consequences of Nobil'

This story gets better and better with each chapter. Thank you for sharing with us.

Only thing wrong with this story is I can’t read more of it right this minute. If I could give it higher than a five, I would. Your pacing and prose is quite good, and I’m liking the Forgotten Realms style storyline. Minor picky point, your detailed action scenes (like the duel with the merchant) are a bit hard to visualize. You may be providing a bit more detail than necessary (I’m a reader not an editor, so I’m not providing the best feedback here). Your big picture action scenes (the fights with bandits in the forest) are, however, very much on point. Excellent job!

Much better. Chapter length is better, fight scene is good. The out of place blacksmith is great, just do not turn him into a swishy wimp and you will have a great story. Keep him a confused but likeable person.

This is good feedback. I'll reread the scene and see how I feel about it. Thank you.

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