by bluknight
Not too much buildup, but enough to make it worth the wait. I can't wait for the next chapter!
A good beginning. You have laid the groundwork for some interesting twists and turns, including MFF with his mom and sis.
Good start. I appreciate character devdelopment. I like real life physical, emotional, and psychological reactions of the characters to real world situations. No monster sexual attributes, no ridiculous durational sexual activity, and no multiplitude sexual partners/prizes.