by Dash91830
I'm not big on the whole crying thing in front of his cheating skank. That's the last thing a guy wants to do when faced with it. The next move would seem to be, move out with Penny and get even with Kath and dad.
I liked. I just hope he won't forgive Kath. I like stories about cheating women that come back repentant but are not forgiven. I would have liked Penny more if she wasn't willing to rape him. Rape is something terrible. I think that the dad is the worst of them. She deserves to be "punished", for example being humiliated by Penny when he tries to seduce her.
She did want him and her sister to break up but didn’t try to sabotage them. Personally I think she is one of the nicest of my protagonists. She never cheated on anyone too.
Help Tim to develop a bigger cock size. Maybe give him a dusting of sexy chest hair to turn Penny on. Give them a fighting chance!
He is a good, sweet person. That’s all he needs.
The start of the story (first few paragraphs) was weak - too much repetition -, but the rest is fine.
Why would you ever start a story that is in the romance category with the protagonist stating that theyd rape someone. Just off-putting and weird
Good story line as for Penny smart, cunning and talented thanks to the cheating sister door is open. Still not sure of your rape thoughts a female dominating a male yep not a problem but saying they are going to rape someone is a little off putting.