All Comments on 'Cheyenne's Revenge Ch. 02'

Ive never been so enticed to keep reading!! Naughty and lovely, leaving me to take care of my wet lil self right here. I'll be back for more...

Great story hot sex. Thanks for sharing

The same ass that yesterday had been virgin, and then reamed until she bled? Sorry, you lost me with that one. Willing suspension of disbelief only goes so far.

Thank you anyway for sharing your efforts.

Jim

recuperate probably longer, though sometimes you do things no matter what and love it too

No character development

No plot beyond revenge sex

This was my first stab at erotica and it was a rather clumsy effort powered more by anger over a story I read here. I wrote what came to mind instead of a more ~ better ~ considered tale.

James aka FinalStand

I like the story. helpful guy, beautiful girl, sex and the semi forced sex You and C forgot to piss all over Joe. Exactly what the 2 women did was weird as they seemed to want it. Then the big problem--- I don't think that someone that was gang raped and her asshole leaking blood would want anything to do with sex for many days or weeks even

An interesting plot, that should lay the foundations of a great story, but your work needs proofreading and editing, you switch tense at irregular intervals, making it difficult for the reader to follow the action. Some of the factual situations need to be reconsidered, fiction only works well when the facts fit.

Good story. Allowing the rapee to rape the raper is a nice touch. For a first attempt it is very good. I look forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.