by curious_cd
D'oh. I didn't even notice that even though I read it through a couple of times. I would use an editor, but I've gotten tired of waiting 2-3 weeks with no reply from half a dozen volunteer editors on this site.
...And Christy is one very hot gurl, thanks for sharing this. It would be really helpful to get some edit help tho, as when you run into the little 'bugs' in the story, they end up slowing things way down. Just a quick sample was the 'Dave and Stacy' reference, for which I had to completely stop and figure out if I missed some chars or not. Turned out that you meant to say 'Tony and Sheri', a simple error, but it really confuses the reader. Overall it was still a wonderful read and I'm so looking forward to reading more of Christy's fantasy!