All Comments on 'Chy, the Shy Babysitter'

Really good job for 1st attempt at writing erotica story. Your description had feelings without being over the top. Keep writing.

More, please. This has real potential for character development!

My Babysitter and I have carried on for over 25 yrs... I was her first.

Beautifully written, 5 stars! Hope there is a chapter 2 and looking forward to reading anything else you write. Great job!

Enjoyed it, write more!

Very good story with a plausible plot, enjoyable pace and warm feeling that two people can join together without all the useless drama. Well done. 5*.

Keep writing, really good job. I like that you were realistic, didn’t try to fuck her brainless for five hours. It was hot, a bit of intimacy and nicely described sex. Well done!

Please write another chapter. Chy loves the little boy she babysits and she and her new boyfriend/husband should give him a brother or sister, maybe both. He doesn't know it, but he just made love to his WIFE...

Very realistic and normal ... good story

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Really enjoyed the descriptions of sex, which came off as sensual and romantic; however, especially in the build up, you should use dialogue instead of some quick description to develop the plot. You said they talked about personal things, so tell us how that develops through their conversation, which have us much more invested in the characters when they're in bed. It's your first story posted and I gave you 5 ⭐️ as encouragement. You've got descriptions down pat, now please give us more insight on how they interact while speaking. Though the texting dialogue was a nice touch, it was too little. Dialogue would also help us understand his background too, like why is he single, has a child and can afford his home.

Great build-up like most of the others commented here, and I hope there's more if these two planned. Only gave it 5 stats b/c I couldn't give it 6.